| Poem: Submit | Random | Best | Worst | Recent | Comments |
|
Solitude (Free verse) by Dovina Resting on sand
near the edge of the waves
a cozy seashell
a spiral in Phi
pillows of pearl line the abode
strong armor against any foe
No resident here
a home just for one
a place to curl up
and do what I want
Let them clamber and rage
and ask where Iâm at
call me recluse
and be just about right.
Up the ladder:
The Bed
Down the ladder:
Crampa
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 6.7647057
Posted: September 13, 2004 11:48 AM PDT; Last modified: September 13, 2004 11:48 AM PDTWeighted score: 6.554348 Overall Rank: 641 Comments:
[7]
Prince of Void @ 83.170.55.137
|
13-Sep-04/6:52 PM
|
Reply
I love the word solitude...u know there is a short-film called "depth of solitude" in that film i really get the depth of solitude ..and its concept was wonderful
[n/a]
Dovina @ 24.52.157.176
> Prince of Void
|
14-Sep-04/9:59 AM
|
Reply
I havenât seen it, but solitude isnât bad at all.
A spiral in phi? I like the sentiment behind it, but I'm just not feelin' this one D.
Anytime I can set two poems before someone and hear him say that only one of them heâs just not feelinâ, well, thatâs a good day. Thanks for honesty.
Have your visited http://poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?i By the way, when a peregrine falcon swoops toward its prey at close to 200 mph, it follows a curve known as a logarithmic spiral. The shortest path, of course, would be a straight one, but since a falcon's eyes are opposed on either side of its head, straight flight would require the bird to cock its head to keep the prey in sight. Nature loves the logarithmic spiral. From sunflowers, seashells and whirlpools to hurricanes and spiral galaxies, we see this form at all scales. Encoded within the logarithmic spiral is perhaps the most mystical of all numbers, phi, approximately 1.61803.
My face is plastered with the Golden Ratio. If you measure the distance from my chin to my eyes, and divide that by the distance between my pupils, you get phi. If it weren't for my wheelchair, and the colossal kidney dialysis machine I've got lashed to my bladder, I'd be beautiful.
You have come back for another look at one of similar facial dimensions.
Dear Dovina,
While this is obviously a pretty picture the language usage does not appear to be very poetic to meeither in its use of metaphor etc, or in its imagery presentation, and there is not rhyme or rhythm. "A picture in Phi" what does this offer us phi "Φ" being the 21st letter of the Greek alphabet, the Greek equivalent of "F", a circle with a line through it, doesn't inspire me with images relevent to seashells or hermit crabs or solitude. So I am sorry but I just don't see the poetry here, just prose.
Apologies . . .
Why do we choke on "a spiral in Phi?" Pray tell, what does it mean Phi not Pi? -9- for being alone in your "phi-ness."
Alone in my spiral, as natural for me as the coil of a seashell, as right as a falconâs dive. (See above)
"right" about the "recluse", for how can this poem, any poem be birth
I'd love to tell you, but what in the world do you mean?
Interesting to say the least.
Just swell.
357 view(s)
|
||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||
