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Solitude (Free verse) by Dovina

Resting on sand near the edge of the waves a cozy seashell a spiral in Phi pillows of pearl line the abode strong armor against any foe No resident here a home just for one a place to curl up and do what I want Let them clamber and rage and ask where I’m at call me recluse and be just about right.

Blue Magpie 13-Sep-04/10:02 PM
Dear Dovina,
While this is obviously a pretty picture the language usage does not appear to be very poetic to meeither in its use of metaphor etc, or in its imagery presentation, and there is not rhyme or rhythm. "A picture in Phi" what does this offer us phi "Φ" being the 21st letter of the Greek alphabet, the Greek equivalent of "F", a circle with a line through it, doesn't inspire me with images relevent to seashells or hermit crabs or solitude. So I am sorry but I just don't see the poetry here, just prose.




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