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Many Thanks (Free verse) by Dovina
On coming back home From being away I really expected no party Condolences or thanks. Oh maybe a word or two From someone who cared, But rhymes and limericks Coming from everyone? I can’t tell you how humble This all makes me feel How utterly unworthy Your concern is quite nice. I just want to ease your troubled minds And say that in Argentina I did not actually drown in the marina, But write this in a little cantina. Now, the words in your verse May sound to some terse And though I may not understand I know your intension Appreciate invention Will get back to you Soon as I can.

Up the ladder: The Sea (revised)

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.875
Weighted score: 5.5042653
Overall Rank: 2672
Posted: September 23, 2004 3:36 PM PDT; Last modified: September 23, 2004 3:36 PM PDT
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[n/a] Bachus @ 24.130.62.63 | 23-Sep-04/6:06 PM | Reply
Nice a poker face...
[10] wFraser Allonby Q.C.w @ 195.157.153.253 | 24-Sep-04/4:49 AM | Reply
Appallingly poignant nonsense
[8] wilco @ 4.227.44.15 | 29-Sep-04/7:45 PM | Reply
I was wondering where you've been.
[n/a] Dovina @ 204.250.12.246 > wilco | 3-Oct-04/10:52 AM | Reply
I've been busy with a different sort of imaginary life. Thanks, it's nice to be missed.
[10] Dan garcia-Black @ 66.159.232.60 | 1-Oct-04/8:07 AM | Reply
It makes sense if you're referring to back then. I thought you were referring to now.
[n/a] Dovina @ 204.250.12.246 > Dan garcia-Black | 3-Oct-04/10:54 AM | Reply
I'm sorry it makse sense in either sense. I sense a senseless thankfulness.
[7] sir_heff @ 65.172.117.1 | 16-Dec-04/9:35 AM | Reply
i think "write" in the 2nd to last stanza should be wrote, but then again mabye i'm just reading it from the wrong angle
[n/a] Dovina @ 69.175.6.101 > sir_heff | 16-Dec-04/12:24 PM | Reply
I wanted the present tense here to show immediacy - a note being written in the cantina right after reading theirs.
[7] sir_heff @ 65.172.117.1 > Dovina | 16-Dec-04/1:55 PM | Reply
ahh i see
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