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Graveyards (Free verse) by TwilightDawned What is it about the graveyards
that draw my vision in,
Perhaps the damnation that is sought
through the many tombstones,
of innocents. Or the mere fact,
that I will be there, six feet under -
burried - alive.
Up the ladder:
Come home
Down the ladder:
ghost host
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Posted: July 5, 2004 2:24 PM PDT; Last modified: July 5, 2004 2:24 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.5042653 Overall Rank: 2672 Comments:
A better than average effort. Buried. "Six feet" is less important than "under-buried." Cliches are as easy to fall into as falling off a log and down into a hole dug in a graveyard.
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Line 2: "that draws my vision"
Good