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Graveyards (Free verse) by TwilightDawned

What is it about the graveyards that draw my vision in, Perhaps the damnation that is sought through the many tombstones, of innocents. Or the mere fact, that I will be there, six feet under - burried - alive.

Dan garcia-Black 6-Jul-04/11:37 AM
A better than average effort. Buried. "Six feet" is less important than "under-buried." Cliches are as easy to fall into as falling off a log and down into a hole dug in a graveyard.




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