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Keep Your Mouth Shut and Your Gun Loaded (Free verse) by wilco I guess that my white collar
makes my blue-collar bitching
seem less convincing.
But Iâm afraid
that when all the debts been paid
Iâll have nothing left to do.
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Posted: September 13, 2004 7:19 PM PDT; Last modified: September 13, 2004 7:19 PM PDTWeighted score: 6.35 Overall Rank: 829 Comments:
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LintyWeenis @ 152.163.101.10
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13-Sep-04/7:34 PM
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Intrigue. Shortness. -8-
Just knock up a neighbor's daughter. You'll be paying for that mistake the rest of your life.
Nothing left to do but blue collar bitching when all the debts are paid? I must be missing something.
Yeah?
i like a short verse, but i don't know...
"makes" and "i'll have" make it a little off. but i'm no stickler for grammar. 328 view(s)
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