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Your Embrace

Member since 2004 · Posted 12 Sep 2004 · 4 comments

The echo of the thunder. The sweet thought of you above with me lying under. Come In Close The Door Turn Off The Light Chills caused by your embrace. My heart jumped into an unfamilar pace. I undress you as I lay down. I start my kissing your lips, which leads me down to your hips. Pleasure given to him by my hand. The moan from his mouth, the clench of my hand. His pleasure the only sound. Running my fingers through your hair. As you whisper the things you want to do in my ear. I want to do this, just because I know it isn't right. Protection rolled over him and placed into me. Pain turns to pleasure, heat smothers the room. Sweat beads roll down his neck. My nails dig in his back.

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4 comments

[9] patty t 12-Sep-04/6:10 PM Reply
more than just a friendly game of twister -9-

but why the change from 'you' to 'him'?
[5] wilco 13-Sep-04/7:32 PM Reply
Naughty, which is kind of nice. I think though, that this kind of thing is better said with a less graphic tone. Not that I'm trying to say that i'm offended or anything. I just think it would be a better poem for it.
[9] Dan garcia-Black 14-Sep-04/12:11 AM Reply
Shouldn't "the clench of my hand" be " I clench his hard gland?"
[n/a] Brandy_n_Cali › Dan garcia-Black 15-Sep-04/5:21 PM Reply
haha