Re: a comment on Peace that Passes Understanding by Dovina	31-Jul-04/3:08 PM
You're two for two.
Re: Peace that Passes Understanding by Dovina	31-Jul-04/9:12 AM
A Ranticle about god is angst that aggravates misunderstanding. Just remember the sentence. "What Would Jesus Do?" Keep in mind "We're all dying (some faster than others)." Ah there's the peace we seek. -9-
Re: Mors Omnia Solvit by shit	30-Jul-04/8:29 AM
Permanent solution to temporary situation. May I have your shotgun when you're finished, Kurt?
Re: Gap-Fold vs. Sour Milk by Venus	28-Jul-04/8:25 AM
The indentation differentiating between Then and Now works very well.
Re: Brats by D. $ Fontera	27-Jul-04/7:42 PM
I know it would be a major grammar gaff but I hear it as "He brat, She brat, You brat, Me brat." Even so, it's endearing.
Re: Wake Up by unouluvme	27-Jul-04/7:34 PM
It seems to mean something to me, if I read it thusly, Wake up Sprint to burial grounds Pool around you let it be water Cards have spoken Don’t wait walls will advance Worlds will shrink ears will give way Cling to a cliché Kiss the poison as the antidote Speak expectations to listen Let fragrance engulf you Did you sleep? A poem of contradictions. Why not?
Re: The Serpent People by horus8	27-Jul-04/7:19 PM
Yeah! Yea! Yes!
Re: The Annual January Thaw by Dovina	27-Jul-04/7:10 PM
Great last two lines! The reversal of whom is against what took me a re-read to get. Well worth it to someone who thinks a hike is walking to the corner 7-11 instead of taking the car.
Re: a comment on Cranberry shoes by INTRANSIT	27-Jul-04/10:32 AM
Phommasanh is the name of an athlete from Laos.
Re: Gap-Fold vs. Sour Milk by Venus	27-Jul-04/10:29 AM
I think it needs a refrain. Maybe just a shorter refrain. "Once... there was freshly laundered attire" "Now... there are tank tops, etc." Let us figure out what happened. Good poem. Great ending.
Re: Cranberry shoes by INTRANSIT	27-Jul-04/9:42 AM
Bitter-sweet Laotian candy. Good prose.
Re: Fear by Mona Lisa	24-Jul-04/7:50 PM
Don't jump! Here's a -7-. Write on, right on.
Re: Bad animal limericks by INTRANSIT	24-Jul-04/7:48 PM
The turtle wins!-9-
Re: Respect on a Quiet Hillside by Dovina	24-Jul-04/7:22 PM
Love it. How does "They paid their respects" instead of "did it" sound to you? Grandpaw was such a 'perv' (in a good way).
Re: Summer by Dovina	22-Jul-04/7:45 PM
Good images. The meter hold true throughout until the end. I guess if you're going to break rhythm that's the place to do it. But, somehow, the loss of those two beats at the end of the last line is disconcerting.
Re: a comment on Poor Unwritten Rabbit by Dovina	20-Jul-04/8:55 AM
BTW, I think that the lack of connective tissue between phrases, sentences and images makes for a slower read. It gives the poem time to form in my thoughts and the end is stronger for your style.
Re: Poor Unwritten Rabbit by Dovina	20-Jul-04/8:52 AM
I never see rabbits when I'm driving at night unless they are wearing red, reflective tape. You have a good eye.
Re: a comment on Divorcing Tennessee by Dovina	19-Jul-04/9:56 AM
Some of the gay guys with whom I work tell me that condoms taste like escargot when sautéed in butter and garlic with a large baguette on the side. You may not hate them if try them that way. I prefer a tongue taco instead. JK, W. Oh, I almost forgot. Get a ribbed condom, turn it inside out and then put it on. Wow, those ribs rock.
Re: It's all over now that you're writing so by fevriere	19-Jul-04/9:00 AM
Could use some paring
Re: Never Ceasing to Amaze by wilco	19-Jul-04/8:36 AM
Never said better.