Re: Los Angeles by Dovina	8-Aug-04/9:28 AM
How is this haiku?
Re: a comment on The World Through One Eye by timtonio	7-Aug-04/8:40 AM
That being the case, I delete my comment due to lack of understanding your poem on my part.
Re: The Glow of the Sun by QuirkyWonder	6-Aug-04/8:46 AM
Is this a rewrite? It is evocative (because I can never spell reminiscent without a spell checker) of a poem I thought I remember seeing posted here before this. However, I enjoyed this one more than the last. It has an "uplift" at the end.
Re: Honey by Jeremi B. Handrinos	6-Aug-04/8:25 AM
Something about this is...
Re: Solid Understanding by Dovina	6-Aug-04/8:10 AM
The inimate moment is lost not only the expression? If that is the meaning then the 2nd verse could use a bit o' rewrite. At this public moment -8-
Re: Concussion + Broken Hearts= bad week by New Life Drug	6-Aug-04/8:05 AM
Imagine how bad it would have been Without the Vicodin!
Re: a comment on Marina by INTRANSIT	5-Aug-04/10:42 AM
No, not sober. I have just stopped drinking alcoholic beverages forever, for the third time in twenty years. As for enjambment, Haiku is so rigid that it begs for it in order to make any sense.
Re: a comment on Marina by INTRANSIT	5-Aug-04/8:53 AM
I think that Zodiac once(perhaps more) refered to me as a "dimtard.' If that comment had been in regard to my comment on this poem, I would have to agree. Yeah, I see what you mean about the masts brushing. Don't know about haiku commas but there should be a natural caesura at the end of each line. If I had read more carefully, I might have caught the masts waiting and the sheets brushing. Too much lack of Alcohol last night. Three weeks and counting the seconds.
Re: Marina by INTRANSIT	4-Aug-04/11:54 PM
i think the masts are waiting and the fog is brushing. "Tall, waiting masts?" or is the fog waiting and brushing? Great images.
Re: Brats by D. $ Fontera	4-Aug-04/7:55 AM
Nice re-write.
Re: Sugared Giraffes by Venus	4-Aug-04/7:54 AM
Curiously evocative.
Re: Wha wha guitar by wnot Dovinaw	3-Aug-04/7:20 PM
"Spoofing of other users is not permitted." This is not a spoof. A spoof would be written in the style of ___________(insert poet). This poem is not written in the style of Dovina. It is written in the style of >not Dovina<. Therefore it is just a freaky, jerky elementary school rhyme. It should take its place next to "fat, fat the water rat," "I see Paris. I see France. I see someone's underpants" and so many others in that genre. -5- for showing up and posting.
Re: two by unknown^user	2-Aug-04/8:11 AM
Wow. Best phrase-"propheteering ministers."
Re: Mushroom Potion #9 by <{Baba^Yaga}>	2-Aug-04/8:08 AM
A modern kind of "I sing the Body Electric." I like it.
Re: Consolation by Dovina	1-Aug-04/9:44 PM
Shoot 'im.
Re: You Can't Kill A Dead Man! by dougsoderstrom	31-Jul-04/5:31 PM
Haiku- 17 syllables, three lines, 5-7-5. Even though "You can not kill a dead man and I am not a- fraid to die, Buddy" has the right syllable count, it doesn't stay true to form. I hate forms. But I like a good line to say when I'm drunk at a bar and some other poet is calling me out(to fight, not to dance). Come to think about it, it works for either happenstance.-5-
Re: Barflies and Bombshells by wilco	31-Jul-04/5:13 PM
A second kiss? Not one last roll in the hay? You get the -9- points because you didn't ask for a -69- before the bombshell drops her drawers.
Re: a comment on The wispears of the night by XxRuby_KillsXx	31-Jul-04/5:06 PM
To my wispy ears the undead are not dead people but those still alive. People around this poet are telling the poet to join them. The decision made to keep walking can mean suicide is imminent just as much as the idea of walking away from suicide is possible. The wispears of the living seem to have made the poet feel uncultivated (fallowed). A tip that the undead are alive is the line when the word "homicide" makes all fall silent. Ghosts or the living dead cannot fear homicide. I fear there is more here than meets the ear.
Re: a comment on The wispears of the night by XxRuby_KillsXx	31-Jul-04/4:50 PM
U no bedder dan dat.
Re: The wispears of the night by XxRuby_KillsXx	31-Jul-04/3:27 PM
The misspellings and lack of punctuation may be a "style" or a "voice" the writer is trying to convey. I need more input before I judge the poet's spelling and grammar level. -5-