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The Glow of the Sun (Free verse) by QuirkyWonder The glow of the sun
Burns my skin
As I lay on the beach
Take in the feel of the sand
And breathe in the smell of the ocean
I hear the waves crashing
Children laughing and playing
And for a moment
I want to be young again
With no responsibilities
And a creative imagination
The innocence & ability to be so naive
Now,
The glow of the sun
Smiles on my skin
As I lay on the beach
Take in the joy of life
And breathe in all the memories I share.
Up the ladder:
To a bum,
Down the ladder:
I don't rhyme enough, eh?
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Posted: August 5, 2004 7:18 PM PDT; Last modified: August 5, 2004 7:18 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.03842 Overall Rank: 7201 Comments:
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Dan garcia-Black @ 66.159.205.135
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6-Aug-04/8:46 AM
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Is this a rewrite? It is evocative (because I can never spell reminiscent without a spell checker) of a poem I thought I remember seeing posted here before this. However, I enjoyed this one more than the last. It has an "uplift" at the end.
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QuirkyWonder @ 168.103.213.241
> Dan garcia-Black
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6-Aug-04/2:45 PM
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I have no idea...not a rewrite that I am aware of. I wrote this poem about a year ago, and this is the first time posting it anywhere on the internet.
Ah, to be young again, or old again, still lying on the beach. Not bad.
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