Re: a comment on How Well I See by Blue Magpie	24-Jun-05/11:05 PM
Yes there is an ear in hearing and an I sight the English language gives me such delight I think you are pushing for the comment though.
Re: A Father's Day Late by meek_little_braggart	23-Jun-05/11:45 PM
I would name it just a rhyme if it were somehow one of mine.
Re: Family by Sunshine Conkey	23-Jun-05/11:42 PM
'common courtesy you use' transposed verbs are really a sign that the poet hasn't put in the required effort, as BWC said a few poems up, it makes one of Yoda think.
Re: Passion by gothiclovepoetiss	23-Jun-05/11:35 PM
But it doesn't say anyhting that hasn't been said a thousand times before, and it offers nothing in the way of beautiful language or memorable structure.
Re: Drama by QuirkyWonder	23-Jun-05/11:31 PM
I would agree with Dovina
Re: A Righteous Prayer by Dovina	23-Jun-05/11:29 PM
As a prayer it seems a little vague as to what is actually wanted.
Re: Release by Miracle	22-Jun-05/10:15 PM
L3S4 should be caught as the rst of the poem is in the past tense, and in dire risk of repeating myself this morning I will suggest that the use of punctuation is normally considered beneficial when included within the written form of the English language, that is assuming you are trying to communicate with someone other than your own subconcious.
Re: Yard Birds by Bankrupt_Word_Clerk	22-Jun-05/10:06 PM
Foul play indeed, but let us not be chicken-hearted, I cluck that a little more punctuation might improve the flavour.
Re: Our world by 47Ronin	22-Jun-05/9:56 PM
You mean there were no plants, rocks, soil or anything?I guess a lot depends on how good your eyesight is.
Re: A spectacular poem by a handsome man by <{Baba^Yaga}>	22-Jun-05/9:54 PM
I suggest you go and live in Myanmar for a year or two.
Re: a comment on Mountain Gorillas by Blue Magpie	22-Jun-05/1:07 PM
Said by who? Yes ofcourse she was determined, anybody who wasn't would have achieved absolutely nothing.
Re: a comment on Mountain Gorillas by Blue Magpie	22-Jun-05/1:01 PM
No, I don't actually think Gorillas think in such a manner, it is a rhetorical question aimed at the reader, who, except in Rockmage's case is unlikely to be a Gorilla
Re: Captain Cannibal by Lenore	22-Jun-05/12:55 PM
Interesting read, if somewhat ghastly.
Re: Slam. by darby pyn	21-Jun-05/10:27 PM
I do not think rockmage is limiting himself really, on the 12 of June he rated all the poems I had then posted, one recieved a three, the others were all zeros and ones. I think he is probably going through an insecurity problem so I shall not join the dance, it would not help I believe. Nevertheless, if I were the type who dished out zeros this might well be a candidate for one.
Re: Arson by Roisin	21-Jun-05/10:17 PM
No bad, a little work, and the addition of a few small words could make it better.
Re: Eternal Pain by lil_evil_boi	21-Jun-05/10:00 PM
Why do I feel like I have read it a thousand times before??
Re: After A Love is Lost by pinay_miss_azn	21-Jun-05/9:57 PM
This is too long for what it has to say.
Re: Treblinka Re-opened by Caducus	20-Jun-05/10:47 PM
I find the constant changing of tenses, from present to past and back again rather strange and I do not see how it helps the poem.
Re: Wash by Bankrupt_Word_Clerk	20-Jun-05/10:36 PM
'Arranged in heaps', disarranged perhaps There was only one bare foot? Some punctuation would improve it, but it was a laugh.
Re: Contemplation by raiyna	19-Jun-05/10:58 PM
The past simple of forsake is forsook not forsaked.