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Treblinka Re-opened (Free verse) by Caducus
Hocked from Aryan mouths murals of anger hit stars faster than a David sling. Chariots of fingers pointed to a yellow star, God’s Aryan eye blind to busy chimneys this witnessing cataract shines on pale valleys silvering the palms of Judas seed. Treblinka minutes are told by graves, big hands little hands set by nazi hands, time differences are wrists. Beneath foreign soil limbs lay like swath stickers in a broth of Jews. Above them are bouquets next to spray paint on granite saying ‘Scum fucking Jews’ by a sward of lit candles.

Up the ladder: Try Thinking Too
Down the ladder: Letting Go

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.6666665
Weighted score: 5.179294
Overall Rank: 4842
Posted: June 20, 2005 8:54 AM PDT; Last modified: June 20, 2005 8:56 AM PDT
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[8] Bankrupt_Word_Clerk @ 71.133.40.25 | 20-Jun-05/7:20 PM | Reply
why blame God?
[5] Blue Magpie @ 212.205.251.55 | 20-Jun-05/10:47 PM | Reply
I find the constant changing of tenses, from present to past and back again rather strange and I do not see how it helps the poem.
[n/a] Caducus @ 172.202.162.240 > Blue Magpie | 21-Jun-05/1:15 AM | Reply
Thats the point exactly to demonstrate how things are still not so different. I'm just exploring the theme and its been so done I doubt anyone can say anything thats not been said already.
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