Release

Member since 2005 · Posted 22 Jun 2005 · 1 comment

Feelings that were felt today we shared not what was there the love for you i had is gone I thought that i had wounded you yet long ago those scars had healed in place of them the apathy unbeknownst to me I labored in the darkened shaft i toiled beneath the earth fool's gold- false hope was all that i could find blinded by it's luster I fed my lies they fed on me and tore away my pain catch up and beat me down again until i realize i cannot lose what i never had deluded by these lies

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[3] Blue Magpie 22-Jun-05/10:15 PM Reply

L3S4 should be caught as the rst of the poem is in the past tense, and in dire risk of repeating myself this morning I will suggest that the use of punctuation is normally considered beneficial when included within the written form of the English language, that is assuming you are trying to communicate with someone other than your own subconcious.