on Dance With Me by marvelis
11 Apr 2003, 4:58 PM
this is one nice romantic poem and by the way you don't need to concentrate much on the rhyming of the poem,many of good poems don't rhyme,modern poetry doens't stand on rhyming so just feel like fre to write don't limit yourself with a usuage of words. i give this 6,pretty good work
on Februarys mother by INTRANSIT
11 Apr 2003, 4:33 PM
something about it touches me alhtough i can't really tell whut.
on Damaged By 'Weakness' by Mr Pig
11 Apr 2003, 4:19 PM
i loved the way that you seem to ask her something(if i touch you,could i be enlightened) but matter of fact is you are more of asking your self,i liked the way you are trying to kill the ghost of you father who is trying to keep you away of the light you are searching for. "there is no shame in holding myself" this sounds like you are tring to convince yourself.i give it 10,awesome work.
on Family Portrait by Mr Pig
11 Apr 2003, 4:07 PM
"Mum would find company in loneliness"
"Everything looks perfect in a Silver frame"
"The King of bastard pawns ashamed of his crown"
i liked these most of all,each one made a vision itself.i give this 9
"Everything looks perfect in a Silver frame"
"The King of bastard pawns ashamed of his crown"
i liked these most of all,each one made a vision itself.i give this 9
on The Blooding by Mr Pig
11 Apr 2003, 3:57 PM
the last 3 stanzas are realy what makes this poem,and i liked using the (I remember) at the begining of a new line.i give it 7
replying on Sorry for all the things by Mutant_X
11 Apr 2003, 3:44 PM
why do i always fail at understanding your twisted expretions?
replying on You are not me by Mutant_X
11 Apr 2003, 3:40 PM
yeah,some of you people write so good, but knowing that you've been through this makes me feel better,thanks,and sure i will check yours.
replying on You are not me by Mutant_X
11 Apr 2003, 3:37 PM
more and more i discover that i really appreciate constructive critiscm so thank you,you are really helping me.
on Februarys mother by INTRANSIT
12 Mar 2003, 7:25 AM
Hi,i would like to invite you to join my poetry group at Studencenter.org,if you are interested just tell me.
on Little Miss Muff by Spider-Man
12 Mar 2003, 7:23 AM
Spider Man,
is it the comic or the tv show!!!!
is it the comic or the tv show!!!!
on A Gift of Beauty... by loneshadow29
4 Nov 2002, 7:49 AM
very sensitive
on ~*Broken Soul*~ by Katie
4 Nov 2002, 7:42 AM
i wish i can write like u,!
on Thoughtless Deed by craiggiarc1971
4 Nov 2002, 7:28 AM
i give it a 6,still need to improve i guess but it's a good work though
on My cousin's baby sitter. by Bachus
28 Oct 2002, 7:42 AM
the last stanza is way impressive
on other by ThreeFourSix
28 Oct 2002, 7:27 AM
unusaul example
on Here In The Heart of Amber by Lenore
28 Oct 2002, 7:15 AM
this is a good poetry
on AIDS in a van by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
28 Oct 2002, 5:01 AM
go and die,have some mercy on me for god sake
on The Nude by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
28 Oct 2002, 4:29 AM
well,i always thought it's awfull to diss others poetry but honestly i think poetry isn't ur thing,try something else