Re: Hardcore Denial or Sumpin'. by Shardik	11-Aug-03/7:15 AM
Start-up to wheels-up, sans warm up. Gone.
Re: Sagadahoc to Hudson by http://mulberryfairy	11-Aug-03/7:06 AM
I think s-1 l-3 is unnecessarily long. s-6, (soon),finally, maybe? s-9 opposite coasts? I'm a truck driver and verified by my atlas: Sagadahoc county,ME, Auburn, Lewiston area. To: Hudson, N.Y., I don't think you'd see much of CT. More like Mass. I am aware that this may be fiction(though it sounds like it may have happened, parts of it at least), This is one of my few areas of knowledge. That's my (big) ding on this. S-12 startle(d). S-13 drop the paranthetical, make 'em look it up. also, why only oral? I would think one would want to "access all areas", especially trying to go through such nonsense. Finally, S-13 (accelerating), breaking pace again, maybe. On a positive note, I really enjoyed this, and I think poetandknowit has a challenger in the poetry/prose arena.
Re: a comment on Sagadahoc to Hudson by http://mulberryfairy	10-Aug-03/8:24 PM
Not necessarily. I understood what was happening when it wasn't. what did I just say? First good read covered it. I'll read it again tomorrow and offer what little help I can. Unless someone beats me to it first.
Re: Can you believe this piece of shit was #1? by horus8	8-Aug-03/8:21 PM
Still the man with brass balls filled with solid gold dancers. or had his way with solid gold dancers.
Re: a comment on Myopic Labotomized Hubris by Retaliate	8-Aug-03/4:29 PM
I'm not sure anything on either side of the pond makes much sense anymore. But, what do I know. I'm just a blue collar brute poorly passing myself off as a poetic pansy. Ha!
Re: Portsmouth belle 3 by Garrett S Sexton	8-Aug-03/4:21 PM
S-4 obviously. and the last line can lose (amongst) and simplify and still be ok.
Re: a comment on Looking down by INTRANSIT	8-Aug-03/4:16 PM
The only thing I changed was (cloisonne). To make the chasm prettier, more attractive to fall into.But still it's lacking alot. Maybe after the weekend I'll tear into it and do a ground-up workover.
Re: a comment on Myopic Labotomized Hubris by Retaliate	8-Aug-03/1:00 PM
why do we have the wrong set of educated fucks in "office"?
Re: a comment on Three Brothers by EAger to Offend	8-Aug-03/12:56 PM
You think that was good? You should see poetandknowit and horus 8 go fist-to-cuffs. Tyson got nuthin' on those two. love the rhyme scheme btw.
Re: a comment on For my wife by INTRANSIT	8-Aug-03/7:00 AM
Why is it you can't say exactly what you want me to do? C'mon. How about some confirmation. I wanna hear it. No more ring around the roses, damnit.
Re: a comment on I An Anew (re edit) by scitz	8-Aug-03/6:55 AM
copy that.
Re: a comment on blue lilac and I (edit) by richa	8-Aug-03/6:36 AM
pardon me. "bowl faced".
Re: I An Anew (re edit) by scitz	8-Aug-03/6:30 AM
rids? or rides. thats the only thing that trips me.
Re: a comment on blue lilac and I (edit) by richa	8-Aug-03/6:08 AM
I wonder if the trombone is an actual sound or he heard the "fluting" of the flower. "bowl like" is mentioned earlier. another similar shape, maybe.
Re: a comment on Looking down by INTRANSIT	8-Aug-03/6:03 AM
Don't worry about it. Nobody kicks like poetandknowit. The whole thing is about travelling the "straight and narrow" and temptation and failure.
Re: Three Brothers by EAger to Offend	8-Aug-03/5:59 AM
You just described most rankers!
Re: a comment on Looking down by INTRANSIT	7-Aug-03/8:13 PM
better?
Re: a comment on Looking down by INTRANSIT	7-Aug-03/8:05 PM
I cheated with the lunatic fringes too. god I suck at this.
Re: blue lilac and I (edit) by richa	7-Aug-03/4:55 PM
...angered by salmon.... but it doesn't fit the tone of your piece. I'm green with anchovies.Sorry, dont like the trombone. another instrument maybe.
Re: Myopic Labotomized Hubris by Retaliate	7-Aug-03/4:50 PM
Go ahead and hit the brake. Just let me change lanes first.