| Re: Today's Spam by nentwined |
27-Feb-06/12:46 PM |
Testing this kiosk.
So far so good. I was thinking about the senryu today. Perfect timing. love 'em!
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| Re: Simon's Legacy (draft) by Caducus |
1-Mar-06/3:00 PM |
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"Draft" o' the day. Cheers!
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| Re: the disadvantages of dropping out by FreeFormFixation |
1-Mar-06/3:05 PM |
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Soo close, here. I wish I hadthe time.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
1-Mar-06/3:07 PM |
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...and the empty gendarm pews staring....
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| Re: Piano by Dovina |
6-Mar-06/3:57 PM |
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Start by taking out all the unecessaries. The -but, the- ands etc. you're really on to something here. I like it. 8.5 though an easy ten. working my way home. Can't wait to get back to "normal". It's been a bad run this time out. Thanks to all for "holding down the fort".
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| Re: The Tale of Hominus Ominus by Blue Magpie |
10-Mar-06/6:03 AM |
"til his tears were dried " I think is off a half beat.
not really enough to worry about.
Groooooovy ,man.
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| Re: Sour Apple by ecargo |
11-Mar-06/9:05 PM |
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This screamed NYC at me. I hope that helps.
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| Re: Call me Floyed by FreeFormFixation |
12-Mar-06/7:12 AM |
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as in the bob and tom show? They're funny, man. I swear to god they are.
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| Re: The Devil's Carnival by Ranger |
13-Mar-06/2:51 PM |
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If there's anything wrong here, I can't find it. I saw a girl being tortured by others on an amusement ride or she was forced to ride and she didn't want to. Now I'm going to read the remarks and see how I did.
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| Re: Climbing the Wall by ecargo |
13-Mar-06/2:59 PM |
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Fantastic beat. I thought you started out talking about trying to walk across a romp-a-room full of kids and their toys. HA! I just got back from Madison, where I read Bookends and Trapped in a horseshoe aloud to a crowd of....7? It seemed to go well.
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| Re: Spoken word (draft) by Adriaan |
13-Mar-06/7:34 PM |
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Keep going. until you run out of logic or it turns benign or rediculous. like my spelling. gah. really. finish this.
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| Re: Perils of the Learning Curve by Dovina |
19-Mar-06/5:02 PM |
Uncharmed- is the best you can do at the end? Bah! 9.5
rounding down. If you have to rewrite the whole line, fix it.
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| Re: Louwanda by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
19-Mar-06/5:04 PM |
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Sister of Towanda and Nuwanda, I'm sure.
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| Re: Sea Words by ecargo |
22-Mar-06/9:13 AM |
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| Re: The Right Call by Dovina |
22-Mar-06/9:16 AM |
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Oh the way kids play adults against one another. Sickos.
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| Re: Buddy by ALChemy |
23-Mar-06/1:37 PM |
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Forgive your master. he's had a severe case of hammertoe and is busy cutting snowflakes at the moment.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
3-Apr-06/2:13 PM |
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if you can't find it, try- miso soup. I used to like Osuimono. Can't find it here. Miso is close enough though.
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| Re: Explorations Underground by ecargo |
3-Apr-06/2:19 PM |
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Woad? Yes! It's twoo! It's twoo! If you changed the color and the setting,(not that you would, and barrow to borough, You get another poem. I love the saluki lean. remember Christof?
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| Re: Pastoral Care (Psalm 23 revisited) by Dovina |
3-Apr-06/2:30 PM |
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the first -within- could be replaced with a semi-colon, I think. I'm no puncuation master. The last line, remove -almost-. It will speak louder and step better. Yeah, -corn, a few. Baaaad girl.
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| Re: Morning City by Jack Diamond |
7-Apr-06/10:27 AM |
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spitfire Mexican hellcat polka- Right on. Lays/Lies, let it slide. beaterrific
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