on Sea Words by ecargo
22 Mar 2006, 9:13 AM
Surfs up!
on Morning City by Jack Diamond
7 Apr 2006, 10:27 AM
spitfire Mexican hellcat polka- Right on. Lays/Lies, let it slide. beaterrific
on The Right Call by Dovina
22 Mar 2006, 9:16 AM
Oh the way kids play adults against one another. Sickos.
on Spoken word (draft) by Adriaan
13 Mar 2006, 7:34 PM
Keep going. until you run out of logic or it turns benign or rediculous. like my spelling. gah. really. finish this.
on Explorations Underground by ecargo
3 Apr 2006, 2:19 PM
Woad? Yes! It's twoo! It's twoo! If you changed the color and the setting,(not that you would, and barrow to borough, You get another poem. I love the saluki lean. remember Christof?
on some deleted poem
3 Apr 2006, 2:13 PM
if you can't find it, try- miso soup. I used to like Osuimono. Can't find it here. Miso is close enough though.
on Pastoral Care (Psalm 23 revisited) by Dovina
3 Apr 2006, 2:30 PM
the first -within- could be replaced with a semi-colon, I think. I'm no puncuation master. The last line, remove -almost-. It will speak louder and step better. Yeah, -corn, a few. Baaaad girl.
on Louwanda by Jeremi B. Handrinos
19 Mar 2006, 5:04 PM
Sister of Towanda and Nuwanda, I'm sure.
on Perils of the Learning Curve by Dovina
19 Mar 2006, 5:02 PM
Uncharmed- is the best you can do at the end? Bah! 9.5
rounding down. If you have to rewrite the whole line, fix it.
rounding down. If you have to rewrite the whole line, fix it.
on Today's Spam by nentwined
27 Feb 2006, 12:46 PM
Testing this kiosk.
So far so good. I was thinking about the senryu today. Perfect timing. love 'em!
So far so good. I was thinking about the senryu today. Perfect timing. love 'em!
on Simon's Legacy (draft) by Caducus
1 Mar 2006, 3:00 PM
"Draft" o' the day. Cheers!
on the disadvantages of dropping out by FreeFormFixation
1 Mar 2006, 3:05 PM
Soo close, here. I wish I hadthe time.
on some deleted poem
1 Mar 2006, 3:07 PM
...and the empty gendarm pews staring....
Start by taking out all the unecessaries. The -but, the- ands etc. you're really on to something here. I like it. 8.5 though an easy ten. working my way home. Can't wait to get back to "normal". It's been a bad run this time out. Thanks to all for "holding down the fort".
on The Tale of Hominus Ominus by Blue Magpie
10 Mar 2006, 6:03 AM
"til his tears were dried " I think is off a half beat.
not really enough to worry about.
Groooooovy ,man.
not really enough to worry about.
Groooooovy ,man.
on The Devil's Carnival by Ranger
13 Mar 2006, 2:51 PM
If there's anything wrong here, I can't find it. I saw a girl being tortured by others on an amusement ride or she was forced to ride and she didn't want to. Now I'm going to read the remarks and see how I did.
on Call me Floyed by FreeFormFixation
12 Mar 2006, 7:12 AM
as in the bob and tom show? They're funny, man. I swear to god they are.
on Sour Apple by ecargo
11 Mar 2006, 9:05 PM
This screamed NYC at me. I hope that helps.
on Climbing the Wall by ecargo
13 Mar 2006, 2:59 PM
Fantastic beat. I thought you started out talking about trying to walk across a romp-a-room full of kids and their toys. HA! I just got back from Madison, where I read Bookends and Trapped in a horseshoe aloud to a crowd of....7? It seemed to go well.