Re: Morning City by Jack Diamond	7-Apr-06/11:18 AM
panaderia is better. but while you're getting nutty about laid, why not leid.
Re: Inbetween Lovers/Blueprint by Ranger	7-Apr-06/12:41 PM
Salute!
regarding some deleted poem...	9-Apr-06/7:48 AM
Look? Listen? of course. that's what we do. drop 'em. Majestical bugs me. after- and we- could use a comma 9.5
Re: Another quarter. by richa	17-Apr-06/6:12 AM
rides (comma) sticks? and cuts/clips? thst's it for my nits.
regarding some deleted poem...	19-Apr-06/11:43 AM
Typo line 5?
Re: Cupid Missed Two Junkies (slightly clearer, rambling draft) by Ranger	15-May-06/12:02 PM
is cukoo there for a reason or just to signify craziness. I think it may better the poem to research birds and find something that emphasizes what you are trying to say. I'm barely learning how to be specific myself so, use salt. 28
Re: A Scientist’s Prayer by Dovina	10-Oct-06/7:35 AM
Would you like my 02?
Re: Innocence revisited by Caducus	10-Oct-06/7:39 AM
The only problem I have is (spastic).
Re: weather poem part 3: the hurricane (renga) by nypoet22	10-Oct-06/7:42 AM
Was this a group effort or a solo project?
regarding some deleted poem...	10-Oct-06/7:49 AM
You're in good hands here, Mr Fugazi. Listen and keep those sleeves rolled up.
Re: Mid-July by Ranger	10-Oct-06/1:00 PM
Cheers!
Re: The Mandarin by Caducus	12-Oct-06/7:24 AM
Line one delete- to me and insert 2 dashes same for line four (I wrote her) can go for two dashes. Drop (noticing), drop laid,drop yet,drop and. There's still something missing from the parts dealing with your father. Can't pinpoint it yet. Good to see you still plugging away. Fuckin' rough aint it?
Re: Wind By Any Other Name by Edna Sweetlove	12-Oct-06/7:34 AM
Still at it I see.
regarding some deleted poem...	12-Oct-06/1:50 PM
This starts to move at line four. melt not melted. anasthetic? the ambulance was a mothers mother, no? The end should loop back to the beginning. Tinker with it. It's in there.
Re: The Hunter, the Hunted, and the Bystander by Dovina	3-Nov-06/6:31 AM
I'd like to know what this assholes problem is. (the driver of the car) And it's too wordy for my tastes. This one could do away with the formal stanzas. Say, what other poetry sites are y'all using these days? What is working for who and why.
Re: Poem for Mahmuth by Dental Panic	3-Nov-06/6:36 AM
Shit. I liked the sadder wiser beers. Fuck. Has everyone out-read me here, too? Love the sounds. If it matters 10.
Re: 311006 txt to russia by daniella	3-Nov-06/6:42 AM
Just -Text to russia- would work. I'd go with less nature oriented scheme. New end: You unfold me in the morning. This could see a ten easy.
Re: Bagni di Lucca by Sasha	8-Nov-06/6:12 AM
Ranger, Howl? Why the eights?
Re: Celebrity by horus8	19-Nov-06/9:08 AM
Damn. Homeboy went off. Do you really want crits on this?
Re: Fifteen by Dovina	20-Nov-06/4:36 PM
(new) downy mustache something about the distant mountain folds- makes no sense to me. I'm assuming the pomegranate berries are your period/ovulation. Why do you run and what exactly are you running from might flesh (no pun intended) this out .