| Re: Bottled Wisdom by Bethy |
27-Sep-08/9:23 PM |
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This poem resonated for me.. I particularly enjoyed the tempo that you have conveyed with your spacing of the text as it conveys the highs and lows of life just as much as the words you have chosen do!
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| Re: Whispers among me by celticskatermatt1 |
27-Sep-08/9:26 PM |
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Celtic.. I really enjoyed your poem as it's resonance chimed a similar chord within me. "The Fire" kindling your toes... just a breath of life, heat, flame, desire...enough to keep you from jumping over the edge.
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| Re: freedom for all by ThePariahDog |
28-Sep-08/5:04 PM |
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your use of similes and metaphors are very poignant!
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| Re: Anger by Celticai |
29-Sep-08/1:15 PM |
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Thanks Bethy... this is just one of those poems that gave me an opportunity to express how I was feeling at the time! :)
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| Re: Rails to Trails by Dovina |
1-Oct-08/3:38 PM |
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Dovina.. my hubby is a train nut.. I love this! Many of the heritage railways would love a copy of this. Congratulations.. it conveys the melancholy and the hope.
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| Re: Lover by Bethy |
1-Oct-08/3:40 PM |
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An aching refrain.. Bethy did you mean to use wisp or whispered in the fifth line? Just wondered if the use of present tense was purposeful?
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| Re: Can you beLIEve? by T. Jonathron Remp |
1-Oct-08/3:43 PM |
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A political politiked commentary on today and the presidential campaign... your word choices create an interesting fluidity to the reading.
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| Re: unheeded by Skamper |
1-Oct-08/3:44 PM |
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Made me think of my teenage years and smoking through the bathroom window!
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| Re: Beauty? by Celticai |
6-Oct-08/1:10 PM |
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I never said that it was fake.. it was more of a comment on the excess and cost and for what end?
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| Re: Amazing Grace ~ for all bass drummers ;) by Celticai |
6-Oct-08/4:58 PM |
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Thanks.. Although the "Yes, it's better than..." are actually a rhythm that I use to play a calypso beat to Amazing Grace.
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| Re: Inner Peace by chesty82 |
15-Oct-08/10:20 PM |
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This gives me a sense of your internal struggle, Chesty.
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| Re: My love by chesty82 |
15-Oct-08/10:21 PM |
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I enjoyed this one! - especially the last verse!
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| Re: Opening Your Heart by chesty82 |
15-Oct-08/10:22 PM |
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Knowing a little of the situation that surrounds the writing of this poem, I'm moved greatly by this. Congratulations Chesty - I hope that the person it was intended for has read it!
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| Re: Words by Celticai |
15-Oct-08/10:26 PM |
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I'm glad that people have found this poem difficult to read.. that was the purpose! lol It was supposed to demonstrate a process rather than a product.
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| Re: Mountain Fever by Celticai |
15-Oct-08/10:30 PM |
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Thank you Nentwined... I suppose the my verbosity overflows into my poetry. I speak very much as I write - just like Regency Ladies - twittering mindlessly, repetitiously covering the same inadequate sayings endeavouring to get my point across. I appreciate all the comments I receive from others on this site.
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| Re: Mountain Fever by Celticai |
15-Oct-08/10:32 PM |
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No one has actually commented on the intent of the poem. I've received many talking about the 'nature' of this poem - that it is about landscapes and one-ness with the earth. It was actually about seeking an orgasmic experience.. go figure.
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| Re: Mountain Fever by Celticai |
19-Oct-08/12:47 AM |
I'd go with not a good poem personally.
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| Re: Poetic Blue Justice by Dovina |
5-Nov-08/1:33 AM |
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When I knew that my father was to pass on, I asked him to leave me his handicapped sign in his will.. for situations where you can't find a damn park! I enjoyed this Dovina. Thank you.
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| Re: butterfly by winniss |
5-Nov-08/1:43 AM |
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