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Bottled Wisdom (Free verse) by Bethy Found a note in side a bottle.
I did.
Over yonder I skipped, under a tree,
I hid.
Found a twig, stirred it 'round.
Not retrieved.
Not relieved.
I heaved.
Ahhh!
Broke the bottle,read the note...
To whom it may concern,
Tis' a lesson you must learn,
to free yourself of doubt,
never fish in a leaky boat.
Found a bottle,
put in note,
threw it out.
Up the ladder:
Before I Go Insane
Down the ladder:
The Monogamous
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Posted: September 25, 2008 6:46 PM PDT; Last modified: September 25, 2008 6:46 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.2134166 Overall Rank: 4424 Comments:
This poem resonated for me.. I particularly enjoyed the tempo that you have conveyed with your spacing of the text as it conveys the highs and lows of life just as much as the words you have chosen do!
Thank you for your kind words Drummah.
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:) Bethy