Re: To Poets Whose Writing is Fecal. by SupremeDreamer	15-Jan-09/6:19 PM
it's just a voice people choose.
Re: a comment on Watching December's Wind by dclark	19-Dec-08/1:32 AM
I usually insert paper and pens into my rectum.
Re: Aeuphoria by MacFrantic	8-Aug-07/7:41 PM
maybe change thunder to rumble, that rhymes to simple, stick with the vowels they drag it out better, ya know?
Re: Sadist by PoetryIsDead	8-Aug-07/7:29 PM
reminds me of sex, maybe? a little brutal ;)
Re: Caprice by PoetryIsDead	8-Aug-07/7:28 PM
i don't get the last line either, but like you said it makes since to you, and thats all that really matters in actuality. i like how i can read it smoothly without to much rhyming and not to little, but i don't like rhyming words like smile and mile, but thats all up to you, i just stick with more of the vowels sounding out the same at the end of lines, or sometimes without.
Re: Kill Criminals In The Name Of JESUS! by Sing4Jesus!	6-Aug-07/11:42 AM
i've realized you really love jesus, and god, and all that bullshit, but if you love somethings give it away, you may have heard that saying before. what i'm saying is in this song of yours, if you killed someone, i don't think your jesus would be to happy.. maybe try writting about some other things?? maybe? .......
Re: Voices Within by DJCopasetic	6-Aug-07/11:36 AM
after the second verse i just quit reading it.... you rhymes are to simple, and to everywhere... i agree with cheese doodles.
Re: My first Haiku by DJCopasetic	6-Aug-07/11:33 AM
Can you not write a better Haiku than a 5th grader?
Re: Amber's Witness by cyan9	1-Aug-07/9:07 AM
This makes my moods change, I go from a worried, to a happier more secure feeling. I like this. Its a very good piece. My Favorite out of all of your work.
Re: Lullaby by lexxie100	1-Aug-07/4:11 AM
I honestly love it, very catchy. here's an 8, and a myspace add.
Re: Quatrain by ALChemy	4-Jun-07/9:58 AM
its pretty good, i like it, if you could find something beside men on the line that reads, "and monsters are born from minds of men." maybe male.
Re: Suck it up for God by Engelbert Humpalot	4-Jun-07/9:54 AM
anal hole? buttlover?
Re: Like a Whore {erotic} by sca	4-Jun-07/2:14 AM
this is a true work of art, i love it, and it ends perfectly
Re: Taupe is an Angry Mob by MacFrantic	1-Jun-07/10:01 PM
i like this, its really well formated with good usage of words, its good
Re: Stealing Glory by Enkidu	1-Jun-07/10:00 PM
i don't catch the meaning of this, are you saying its to hard to be glorious? it doesnt make much since at all
Re: One O Five in the A.M. by Enkidu	1-Jun-07/3:33 PM
gay. this is just a simple poem with no meaning, unless you have it completly hidden, its horrible in my opinion, but maybe you wrote this fucked up.
Re: Time Imperfect by MacFrantic	1-Jun-07/3:31 PM
i really like this, i can't really find the meaning, but its good, the shirtless cowboys is kind of gay, but i'm sure theres a meaning behind it. i like the layout of this poem, its good.
Re: Thinking by Tiffany	1-Jun-07/3:28 PM
this honestly could've been written by a fourth grader.
Re: Ago by Enkidu	1-Jun-07/3:26 PM
who is bynaan? is he a king? or a fed up civilian? i like this but its kind of caught up in itself. like if the kings are so mighty then why does thier blood flow? are you meaning in different terms than the way its read? other than that it'll be good when you finish.