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Ago (Other) by Enkidu
Long before the day arose To bicker with the night Seven kings from seven isles Frail with solitary fright Cowered on thrones from which their blood now flows Not one kin of any seed Lived to see the solemn days When chaos ruled upon the men And death spoke omens to the ways When heroes lived but none had failed to bleed Apox upon that sinful tower Raised by gods above the sky The daughter of Bynaan from Rjgaan Misled by fire from heathen eye Intoxicates herself with blood and power *Unfinished* *Comment if you like*

Down the ladder: The Star Of The Bum

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.5
Weighted score: 4.9403987
Overall Rank: 9065
Posted: July 15, 2004 11:57 PM PDT; Last modified: July 15, 2004 11:57 PM PDT
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[8] donmiguel1960 @ 68.96.168.211 | 16-Jul-04/8:57 AM | Reply
its a good start
[9] ?-Dave_Mysterious-? @ 80.42.83.114 | 16-Jul-04/5:19 PM | Reply
The first verse reminds me of the book of Revelation.
[n/a] dclark @ 71.30.10.41 | 1-Jun-07/3:26 PM | Reply
who is bynaan? is he a king? or a fed up civilian? i like this but its kind of caught up in itself. like if the kings are so mighty then why does thier blood flow? are you meaning in different terms than the way its read? other than that it'll be good when you finish.
[n/a] SomeNewKill @ 71.30.10.41 | 2-Jun-07/11:52 AM | Reply
well formed.
[n/a] lmp @ 141.154.134.3 > SomeNewKill | 4-Jun-07/2:48 PM | Reply
sorry, but that phrase always reminds me of stool samples.
[n/a] lmp @ 141.154.134.3 | 4-Jun-07/2:47 PM | Reply
please, continue.....
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