| Re: One O Five in the A.M. by Enkidu |
1-Jun-07/3:33 PM |
|
gay. this is just a simple poem with no meaning, unless you have it completly hidden, its horrible in my opinion, but maybe you wrote this fucked up.
|
|
|
 |
| Re: Stealing Glory by Enkidu |
1-Jun-07/10:00 PM |
|
i don't catch the meaning of this, are you saying its to hard to be glorious? it doesnt make much since at all
|
|
|
|
| Re: Taupe is an Angry Mob by MacFrantic |
1-Jun-07/10:01 PM |
|
i like this, its really well formated with good usage of words, its good
|
|
|
|
| Re: Like a Whore {erotic} by sca |
4-Jun-07/2:14 AM |
|
this is a true work of art, i love it, and it ends perfectly
|
|
|
|
| regarding some deleted poem... |
4-Jun-07/2:25 AM |
|
|
|
| Re: Suck it up for God by Engelbert Humpalot |
4-Jun-07/9:54 AM |
|
|
|
| Re: Quatrain by ALChemy |
4-Jun-07/9:58 AM |
|
its pretty good, i like it, if you could find something beside men on the line that reads, "and monsters are born from minds of men." maybe male.
|
|
|
|
| regarding some deleted poem... |
4-Jul-07/11:28 PM |
|
Its to hard to get into any of your work, no offense but you are a completely hideous writer. Make some things more catchy and less boring to read.
|
|
|
|
| Re: Lullaby by lexxie100 |
1-Aug-07/4:11 AM |
|
I honestly love it, very catchy. here's an 8, and a myspace add.
|
|
|
|
| regarding some deleted poem... |
1-Aug-07/8:42 AM |
|
why do you only rank me zero, and give me no criticism?
|
|
|
|
| Re: Amber's Witness by cyan9 |
1-Aug-07/9:07 AM |
|
This makes my moods change, I go from a worried, to a happier more secure feeling. I like this. Its a very good piece. My Favorite out of all of your work.
|
|
|
|
| regarding some deleted poem... |
6-Aug-07/11:29 AM |
|
i haven't read all of your work, but thus far, this is my favorite... even though you're a better writer than me, i'd have to say the first and last lines should be switched, in my opinion. because if you're deteriorating then you're no longer waiting for the ground, right?
|
|
|
|
| Re: My first Haiku by DJCopasetic |
6-Aug-07/11:33 AM |
|
Can you not write a better Haiku than a 5th grader?
|
|
|
|
| Re: Voices Within by DJCopasetic |
6-Aug-07/11:36 AM |
|
after the second verse i just quit reading it.... you rhymes are to simple, and to everywhere... i agree with cheese doodles.
|
|
|
|
| Re: Kill Criminals In The Name Of JESUS! by Sing4Jesus! |
6-Aug-07/11:42 AM |
|
i've realized you really love jesus, and god, and all that bullshit, but if you love somethings give it away, you may have heard that saying before. what i'm saying is in this song of yours, if you killed someone, i don't think your jesus would be to happy.. maybe try writting about some other things?? maybe? .......
|
|
|
|
| regarding some deleted poem... |
6-Aug-07/11:50 AM |
|
this is disgusting, which makes it better.
|
|
|
|
| Re: Caprice by PoetryIsDead |
8-Aug-07/7:28 PM |
|
i don't get the last line either, but like you said it makes since to you, and thats all that really matters in actuality. i like how i can read it smoothly without to much rhyming and not to little, but i don't like rhyming words like smile and mile, but thats all up to you, i just stick with more of the vowels sounding out the same at the end of lines, or sometimes without.
|
|
|
|
| Re: Sadist by PoetryIsDead |
8-Aug-07/7:29 PM |
|
reminds me of sex, maybe? a little brutal ;)
|
|
|
|
| Re: Aeuphoria by MacFrantic |
8-Aug-07/7:41 PM |
|
maybe change thunder to rumble, that rhymes to simple, stick with the vowels they drag it out better, ya know?
|
|
|
|
| Re: To Poets Whose Writing is Fecal. by SupremeDreamer |
15-Jan-09/6:19 PM |
|
it's just a voice people choose.
|
|
|
|
