Lullaby

Member since 2007 · Posted 30 Jun 2007 · 5 comments

Rain sing me a lullaby Keep it soft and slow Sing the song of nature Hear the moonlight glow Let the darkness be your blanket And the stars your nightlight Rain sing me a lullaby To help me sleep tonight

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[6] Skamper 30-Jun-07/6:16 PM Reply

You don't need the 'night' in nightlight - we know it's dark you told us that in the first line of the second verse. Unless you are referring to the light a child may need to sleep with? Still you mention night again in line four - the flow would work better without the extra night.

[8] Ranger 1-Jul-07/3:21 AM Reply

Nice.

[6] Dovina 1-Jul-07/2:02 PM Reply

L4 seems there only for the rhyme.

[7] INTRANSIT 6-Jul-07/7:24 AM Reply

I'm on the positive side here. Perhaps -memorie(s)- instead of night light. There's a subtle rythm in this poem.

[8] dclark 1-Aug-07/4:11 AM Reply

I honestly love it, very catchy. here's an 8, and a myspace add.