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Lullaby (Other) by lexxie100

Rain sing me a lullaby Keep it soft and slow Sing the song of nature Hear the moonlight glow Let the darkness be your blanket And the stars your nightlight Rain sing me a lullaby To help me sleep tonight

Skamper 30-Jun-07/6:16 PM
You don't need the 'night' in nightlight - we know it's dark you told us that in the first line of the second verse. Unless you are referring to the light a child may need to sleep with? Still you mention night again in line four - the flow would work better without the extra night.




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