who is bynaan? is he a king? or a fed up civilian? i like this but its kind of caught up in itself. like if the kings are so mighty then why does thier blood flow? are you meaning in different terms than the way its read? other than that it'll be good when you finish.

this honestly could've been written by a fourth grader.

i really like this, i can't really find the meaning, but its good, the shirtless cowboys is kind of gay, but i'm sure theres a meaning behind it. i like the layout of this poem, its good.