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Stealing Glory (Free verse) by Enkidu
Congregation beneath a blue moon whispers Two hundred yards for what For Glory Glory is not worth the risk The measured darkness reveals nothing and no one So strays the guard from his post Measured steps echoing metal soles Carefully, the shadows await a faux pas The shadows Eye to eye As the day rises, more silence is heard within the stir Glory will fail us No...Glory shall not let cry The silence breaks Crying now The alarm wails a deep red Glory sits beneath her opaque sky Swept away in the arms of darkness She cries muted tears of silence Midday glows and Glory speaks The darkness has lifted me But I can see him no longer

Down the ladder: I smell coffee

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.818182
Weighted score: 4.909091
Overall Rank: 9700
Posted: April 21, 2004 5:38 PM PDT; Last modified: April 22, 2004 6:40 PM PDT
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[8] deleted user @ 68.66.196.168 | 22-Apr-04/1:11 PM | Reply
For Glory and esprit de corps! The lone comma seems crying for help from buddies. I think they would ease the flow.

I am hoping you will take the time to answer my comment in response to your comment on "Didactic Phoneticals."
[n/a] Enkidu @ 198.81.26.49 > deleted user | 22-Apr-04/6:42 PM | Reply
Why add more when you can erase the loner? *heh*
[n/a] dclark @ 71.30.10.41 | 1-Jun-07/10:00 PM | Reply
i don't catch the meaning of this, are you saying its to hard to be glorious? it doesnt make much since at all
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