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love your mother: (Free verse) by Sapphire
rolling green hills and salty sea sprays carry me home, take me away cold deep cracks of mother earths viens dip in my toes, cast off my dialy chains rich warm terra firma to trod underfoot bliss, ease my day, onward i plod

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.904762
Weighted score: 4.906475
Overall Rank: 9668
Posted: March 16, 2002 1:12 AM PST; Last modified: March 16, 2002 1:12 AM PST
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[n/a] nentwined @ | 16-Mar-02/1:21 AM | Reply
pleasant and I can make sense of it without difficulty (I think)! =) The last three words seem out of place, though -- plodding is tired, unhappy work. if you're trying to mix that in with the appreciation of the earth, I think maybe more could be shown...
[5]... anonymous @ | 4-Apr-02/2:47 PM | Reply
hey hey-
i really like the imagery, but where are you going? i don't see where you are going with the whole point of the poem. maybe i'm just dense!
[5]... anonymous @ 204.245.176.100 | 14-May-02/9:27 AM | Reply
it's just so.... wrong. especially the trod/plod rhyme... ick.
[3] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 18-Aug-02/1:53 AM | Reply
i wonder who's retarded evil twin this is...da..oh..ah..nevermind
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