Re: a comment on Paper Maker by Skamper	19-Oct-07/5:15 AM
it's taken me a while to get a hang of the preposition thing - and to notice your comments...thanks.. :)
Re: a comment on The Search by Skamper	19-Oct-07/5:12 AM
yeah, it needs sharpening...looking back
Re: RAGTIME by xyz	14-Oct-07/7:57 PM
why don't you just throw stones at her - pull her hair and maybe snap her bra-strap. then she'll know you really like her
Re: inside the raven by PsydewaysTears	14-Oct-07/7:53 PM
nice work - lurking evil in a gently lulling tune... always the trap. :)
Re: a comment on The Friendship Storm by x0lovelylarnx0	14-Oct-07/7:44 PM
Ok...you have an idea in your head of what you want to write and it seems to me you use terms that are overused and very familiar to what the public will see. Instead of thinking about what YOU see, you create the scene that's easily recognisible but totally worn out. If you write just for the recognition then you need to relax and find your own style - because this is fairly generic.
Re: a comment on back o' the fridge by nypoet22	14-Oct-07/7:34 PM
I know the idea of what it was in the back o' the fridge isn't really important for this poem, but would you humour me (more like my daughter who I read this to) and put a name to it... :)
Re: Solstice, 2007 by lectricprincess	13-Oct-07/9:47 PM
a pure pleasure to read -
Re: back o' the fridge by nypoet22	13-Oct-07/9:43 PM
as natural as a dancer...loved it
Re: The Devil and I by forsaken	13-Oct-07/9:34 PM
disjointed and lacking any kind of rhythm I could find (maybe just my two left brains)
Re: The Friendship Storm by x0lovelylarnx0	13-Oct-07/9:28 PM
this is very bland - you need to drop such overused phrases and take what is in your head and write it in your own words...don't worry about what other people rate your work, it's not that important...honestly you seem to want to play to the masses instead of just playing.
Re: a comment on A Patch of Time by Skamper	13-Oct-07/9:16 PM
I see it now - and I got the tenses wrong...feels should be felt - thankyou :)
Re: a comment on Tropical afternoon by cpill	25-Sep-07/10:42 PM
Not insulted at all - I quite like being ambigious even with gender.
Re: a comment on Tropical afternoon by cpill	25-Sep-07/10:41 PM
Much better images...menstruation is a feeling all to it's own...I should write about it... I do like this write - it's quiet way of getting the message across...
Re: Death of a Drug Addict by SupremeDreamer	25-Sep-07/10:35 PM
damn sad
Re: Empathy with the childhood dreams by Prince of Void	25-Sep-07/10:32 PM
The last two lines had me nodding in agreement - some lives gain very little, and others nothing at all.
Re: Matter of Will by forsaken	25-Sep-07/10:29 PM
At first read I thought you were writing this as a writer - with total control of what your written characters do, but now I'm not so sure. Towards the end you give the impression of being forced into an action that will make you the person every-one thinks you are...Still confused - but I like a challenge...
Re: Lost Soul Place by sonawrote	25-Sep-07/10:25 PM
I like the rhyme for this write - it reminds me of something I just can't put my finger on...take this to it's darkest edge with a hint of the evil that resides within lonely soul place. It's almost macabre...( a few typos too need fixing)
Re: Ad Infinitum by MacFrantic	25-Sep-07/10:21 PM
gloomy - and I feel the need to rush to the defence of being alive.
Re: Still Life by thetrev	25-Sep-07/10:18 PM
I feel I want to read more into this than what is apparant - I will take it at face value and maybe add just hint of human emotion to it. I enjoyed it - scene well captured
Re: Stuck in Re-Verse by Alex Green	19-Aug-07/4:46 AM
go to the music shop and find some Cake, take it home, listen to it...sigh...