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Lost Soul Place (Free verse) by sonawrote
Behind these smiling eyes, and this smiling face is a dark and scarry, lonley lost soul place Surrounded by the faces, so many people here but none of them know me, or the things that I fear I can be the queen of the plastic smile staying hidden from myself, hiding in denile crying all alone, wondering what's wrong with me smiling at the world, cause I don't want you to see I'm sitting in this darkness, I just can't see the light and I don't know if I can find the strength to fight skeletons in my closet, at least a graveyard full holding the door shut inside in case you try to pull the door open to see just what there is inside sugar coated heartache, I can't trust to confide with all this on my plate my tears could make a river but a plastic coated smiles is what I will deliver because.... behind these smiling eyes, of this smiling face is a dark and scarry, lonley lost soul place.

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.3333335
Weighted score: 5.0397344
Overall Rank: 7083
Posted: September 24, 2007 11:33 AM PDT; Last modified: September 24, 2007 11:34 AM PDT
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[6] Skamper @ 58.171.18.250 | 25-Sep-07/10:25 PM | Reply
I like the rhyme for this write - it reminds me of something I just can't put my finger on...take this to it's darkest edge with a hint of the evil that resides within lonely soul place. It's almost macabre...( a few typos too need fixing)
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