| Re: The Way You Could Say Nothing (But still I understood) by frostygirl |
28-Jul-02/6:33 PM |
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There once was a girl from Montana/Who liked to get off on bananas/But after a while/She had awful piles/Because she was putting the banana in the wrong hole the silly cow.
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| Re: The Price by Bluesee |
28-Jul-02/6:32 PM |
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See 'Pants' by Settle for more information on dresses. You might also get some insane crap but what the fuck it looks like you could use some more material.
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| Re: CityClub by wolfgang |
28-Jul-02/6:29 PM |
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So, basically, what you're saying is that you're part of an l33t subculture, no? GEE FUCK ME I WISH I WAS PART OF AN L33T SUBCULTURE. And because I don't think I can read any more of horus8's comment-based obscurities without generating some, closet dweezle did you know why did O Jesu what have I done?
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| Re: ~Witchcraft~ by Lenore |
28-Jul-02/5:07 PM |
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I suggest: A scented wind wafting, embrowning the air / blew through the cheeks of soiled dispair
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| Re: Me and the Darkness by aurora |
28-Jul-02/5:03 PM |
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I don't think this is a very good poeme. I especially like the fourth verse, in which you could only think of two lines so you just repeated them to make it four. Moreover, the whole piece is an utterly ridiculous attempt to appear 'deep' and 'troubled'. It's just a vague, teenage rambling about 'darkness'. No matter how hard you try, any poeme that tries to be 'dark' by using the word 'darkness' will fail. You fail.
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| Re: Rain by frostygirl |
28-Jul-02/3:57 PM |
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I do believe you're a dunce.
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| Re: Truth of the Moon by ObiWonKn |
28-Jul-02/8:29 AM |
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God damn it why does every third poem I read make absolutely no fucking sense? Lines like 'guarding our only truth' are the fastest way to Hell, my lad.
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| Re: Yes Sir by wolfgang |
28-Jul-02/8:26 AM |
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Seriously chess isn't that hard to learn.
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| Re: Jesus was a necromancer by horus8 |
28-Jul-02/8:26 AM |
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I don't care what you say. I can get four people to testify he was building my hotrod at the time.
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| Re: Cow Do by http://David Bowman |
28-Jul-02/5:42 AM |
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I like the way you used "pooh" instead of "poo" to make it seem less naughty.
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| Re: Reverse Pschology by Mister Cakes |
27-Jul-02/6:36 PM |
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Ahhh but this isn't meant to be reverse 'psychology'. It's reverse 'Pschology'. Didn't you read the title, Dweeb-Features?
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| Re: love is true by -=??lilaznjen??=- |
26-Jul-02/2:19 PM |
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Line 1: 'Love' is neither true nor false. It is not a propostition. Line 2: This doesn't tell us anything we don't already know. Its sole purpose is to rhyme with Line 4. This makes the poeme seem forced. Lines 3&4: These make people say 'cute' or 'witty'. I could understand this if they were so hilarious that they made up for the rest of the piece. Unfortunately they fail. You fail.
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| Re: AIDS in a van by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. |
26-Jul-02/2:04 PM |
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you have a horrible face!
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| Re: Hate Me by lucky_cmc |
26-Jul-02/1:57 PM |
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| Re: why? by emilys369 |
26-Jul-02/1:49 PM |
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You shouldn't write ANY poemes. You should lock yourself in your room and keep out of sight.
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| Re: Heaven vs. Hell by angel born in hell |
26-Jul-02/11:48 AM |
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(a) Why is this poeme called 'Heaven vs. Hell'? (b) I'd wager 'Life vs. Death' is a more fitting title (c) This poeme is almost exactly the same as your other poeme (d) This is because they are both dull, teenage girl poemes (e) Great poeme!
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| Re: ungle stop by wowzers718 |
25-Jul-02/2:43 AM |
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The old 'sneaky uncle' problem, eh? Don't worry! The behaviour exhibited by your....I mean your friend's uncle is perfectly normal.
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| Re: The Poison by TheTiredTyrant |
22-Jul-02/4:56 PM |
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| Re: Hands. by LucidRevelation |
22-Jul-02/4:42 PM |
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I wish I had hand(s) instead of these cumbersome trotters! Great poeme!
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| Re: A Passing Love by razorgrin |
22-Jul-02/4:39 PM |
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Look at us guys! Bickering like children! I don't know about you, but I write about issues.
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