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Heaven vs. Hell (Free verse) by angel born in hell
Of all the faces I'm umknown, in my mind I'm so alone. I'm just another face no one seems to see, behind all the darkness inside of me. Every expression is there to hide, my emotions I fell inside. So today I decide the only answer is suicide. I want to go home the only place where I don't feel alone. A place with no more torcher and pain, because here I know it will never change. I can't deal with the way you treat me, my pain inside you will never see. You were always bind, to the things you could never find. When I die I will be free, no more pain inside of me. no need to hide my face, no drugs to make me feel safe, no more problems to hide, no more feeling traped inside. Because death is better than here, life is what I fear.

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.142857
Weighted score: 5.03842
Overall Rank: 7176
Posted: July 25, 2002 10:33 PM PDT; Last modified: July 25, 2002 10:33 PM PDT
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[10] shwenatjadeflower @ 68.12.149.5 | 25-Jul-02/10:40 PM | Reply
hmm...don't kill yourself you'd be wasting talent. :)
[6] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 25-Jul-02/10:43 PM | Reply
"and the angels of god slept upon the daughters of man creating giants" this website aparently houses all of the known serephin ever identified we have hot ones, cold ones, dark ones, old ones, good ones and really poo pooy ones (hold the poi mom it's time for the pig blood and lu out) don't kill yourself "they are never worth it" now hillary clinton naked on cocaine. that's a death sentence p
[n/a] keatsImnot @ 207.121.143.66 | 26-Jul-02/3:53 AM | Reply
WE ALL GET A BIT P'SS'D OF SOMETIMES, JUST LET IT OUT
[n/a] razorgrin @ 142.166.108.149 | 26-Jul-02/6:05 AM | Reply
Learn to spell, you self-pitying rectal tick. Kill yourself now and save me the effort.This is one of the most cliched, angsty pieces of fecal matter ever written.Aww...you're depressed because ...your vacant boyfriend dumped you? the other kiddies at the local goth club totally ignored you? some person you fucked saw you in good light and won't speak to you?grow up kid.Also, "angel born in hell" that is the most idiotic, pseudo-deep alias ever. You and the legions like you make poets look bad.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 217.39.149.1 | 26-Jul-02/11:48 AM | Reply
(a) Why is this poeme called 'Heaven vs. Hell'? (b) I'd wager 'Life vs. Death' is a more fitting title (c) This poeme is almost exactly the same as your other poeme (d) This is because they are both dull, teenage girl poemes (e) Great poeme!
[2] Tintagiles @ 142.166.234.173 | 13-Sep-04/2:25 PM | Reply
Suddenly I remember why rhyming fell into disrepute. But hey, unless you've died before, how d'you know that death's not worse?
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