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Lucky's Day (Free verse) by razorgrin
On a grey day, a homeless man named Lucky shambled into an alley behind an expensive restaurant, the ache in his belly calling him to the Dumpsters to mine for food. He opened the nearest one and saw hacked-off limbs, torsos, and rotted coils of entrails stacked to the top of the bin. Among the jumble of unnamed limbs, a few heads bearing the pouched eyes and matted hair of fellow vagrants. Lucky's eyes locked with theirs and he knew why the shelters have been so empty lately. Lucky left the alley, never to return.

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.75
Weighted score: 5.660598
Overall Rank: 2085
Posted: July 12, 2002 3:06 PM PDT; Last modified: July 12, 2002 3:06 PM PDT
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[6] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 12-Jul-02/4:59 PM | Reply
I was hoping to keep that spot a secret??
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 217.39.149.233 | 19-Jul-02/2:35 PM | Reply
This poeme is genius. And you like Tom Waits. Perhaps I should promote you to the level of "top-notch dullard"
[n/a] razorgrin @ | 19-Jul-02/2:54 PM | Reply
I'm promoted from what, o seraphim with scatological tasts?
[n/a] razorgrin @ | 19-Jul-02/2:55 PM | Reply
thanks, by the way. i thoght of it while I was eating and almost choked to death laughing.
[n/a] razorgrin @ | 19-Jul-02/2:58 PM | Reply
truly my heart has been warmed.
[6] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 | 7-Aug-02/3:15 PM | Reply
What is this? A Ricki Lee Jones concert. This is a shambles! Hardly at all interesting. In fact regrettably petite both in it's irony, and throw away attitude. Too sebaceous.
[n/a] razorgrin @ | 7-Aug-02/3:50 PM | Reply
sebaceous?? why "sebaceous"?
[7] ==Doylum @ 62.6.73.67 | 7-Aug-02/3:59 PM | Reply
Why sebaceous? Let me englighten you. Bachus is a cake retentive lad, his keyboard is awash with pastry, his monitor drips with lard, whilst looking at his oily taxan all he could think of was fat lovely fat.
[10] Shin-Bojangles @ 198.164.188.188 | 13-Aug-02/12:51 AM | Reply
I think we all have moments like the one befalling our "Lucky" here.
Those little, "Oh crap, a dumpster full of dead people" moments that make life that much more interesting.
It's the true joy of sharing.
[0] sk8boardandpoems @ 24.167.109.182 | 25-Feb-03/3:49 PM | Reply
zero zero homeless is what you would be but no....poetry saved you by the hair of your chinny chin chin!
[n/a] razorgrin @ 192.197.142.128 > sk8boardandpoems | 26-Feb-03/7:10 AM | Reply
Almost clever, but no. It was LORD JESU who saved me. have you been saved?
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