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Free verse № 5704

The Poison

by TheTiredTyrant

Member since 2002 · Posted 22 Jul 2002 · 12 comments

The bait, the prey, the mice, debate the method of demise, debate your high, i'll lie beside you, walk you down and lay the beat beneath your bed. Beneath the dead. Debate the method in your head, the chemical misanthropy saving you from blame. I'll stand below you, lift you up, increase the pain.

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12 comments

[10] johnnyfontaine23 22-Jul-02/4:27 PM Reply
Wow. There is so much anger and hate in this poem, i just want to go and give the writer a hug. Inspiring.
[10] johnnyfontaine23 22-Jul-02/4:27 PM Reply
Wow. There is so much anger and hate in this poem, i just want to go and give the writer a hug. Inspiring.
[n/a] razorgrin 22-Jul-02/4:32 PM Reply
oooo..I like this one a lot!
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 22-Jul-02/4:56 PM Reply
WTF! LOL! ASL!?!?!
[10] ARTIE 22-Jul-02/5:07 PM Reply
Oh straightened back,
on slab of stone,
so tense, no slack,
you're not alone!
[7] horus8 22-Jul-02/6:01 PM Reply
Strichnine is best served cold. Revenge a turnip enima, my love tireless
[9] deleted user 23-Jul-02/3:05 AM Reply
like chocolates and cigarettes.. i know they're bad for me, but i just can't leave 'em alone.
[4] Holden 23-Jul-02/10:55 AM Reply
I think this is quite good but over-rated personally.
[n/a] deleted user 23-Jul-02/5:14 PM Reply
I personally feel this is a piece of pure brilliance. I cannot see how this can be over-rated in anyway. You feel the anger, the pain and the torment within these words. Beautifully painful.
[10] Art Glocken 27-Jul-02/8:58 AM Reply
Wow Wee
how inspiring
[10] The troubled sinner 29-Jul-02/5:35 AM Reply
This poem perfetly summarises what is wrong with the people of my city. Sheffield. Amazing. I feel like the mice.
[8] Shuushin 8-Dec-03/5:52 AM Reply
This is quite good. A bumping cadence that keeps things interesting.