| Re: To Lesley by Bahookie |
8-May-03/1:13 AM |
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Hey, that's some real good shit, kid. I bet Lesley will really appreciate it!! Why don't you make some sort of multimedia presentation out of it? You could cut out the shape of your love from a single sheet of moistened cardboard, mount it on the very fabric of your being with a stapler of trust, and then shove it into Lesley's face and grind it back and forth until Lesley doesn't have a face anymore, just a sticky bulbous liquid red mass and you're screaming and trying to wake up but you've really done it this time, you sick fucker.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
8-May-03/1:19 AM |
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Fucking goths. If I wanted to read the erotic adventures of lestat and his merry men I'd be looking on livejournal, not poemeranker. 10/10 for effort though!!!
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
8-May-03/1:22 AM |
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Great work! I can't help but notice that you sometimes have up to three words in a row without a linebreak. Transcending this limitation and freeing your mind from the constraints of sequence-based word melding can only lead to greater euphoric heights of abortive joy!!
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| Re: Vivid Anger by DeadtotheWorld |
8-May-03/1:25 AM |
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| Re: I wish... by Jai |
8-May-03/1:26 AM |
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I wish I could break your face.
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| Re: Fire roses by Indigo |
8-May-03/1:37 AM |
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You should rewrite this in the shape of a heart, or perhaps a bumblebee.
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| Re: Pele's pulse by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
8-May-03/1:45 AM |
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| Re: Dance With Me by marvelis |
8-May-03/2:29 PM |
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On your face I now do fart.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
8-May-03/5:06 PM |
Freedom is never chutney
---from a cage
Once you've chutneyed your own face with chutney
---after a while
Deep chasms of chutney engulf your
---once happy life
Gentle moments of tenderness begin to feel
---like chutney
In public you have to cover yourself with a giant nappy
---you look normal
-----but deep
-------inside
---------you're just a gibbering mass of chutney
-----------superimposed on a vast lattice
-------------of lettuce and cat-shaped ankles
woven by every person you've ever hated or will hate
as every man who's ever hurt you laughs and walks away like some sort of spastic
after witnessing your never ending agony. Forget it, Jake.
-----------------------------------------------------It's Chutneytown.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
8-May-03/8:28 PM |
Unfortunately, you have fallen victim to a variation of Berry's paradox. "Something that I won't even mention" is a mention of the very thing you purport not to be mentioning. Plainly, ~Ex(Mx & ~Mx), so unless a formalisation of your theory of the good things in life is too weak to even derive that, it is inconsistent, since one of its theorems (if not axioms) is Ex(Mx & ~Mx).
I'm afraid I have no choice but to give this poeme a 0.
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| Re: Vivid Anger by DeadtotheWorld |
9-May-03/6:50 AM |
So many problems in this world today
I get more cuts and bruises everyday
Iâm crazy, sick and twisted, you just canât
Mess with this, Hell man, when you get right
Down to it Iâm ballistic, found, bound
Within my rights, I put on my gloves and letâs
Get on with this fight, donât back away, and cuss
Todayâs that day I unleash my rage, my anger
So vivid the earth trembles, it shakes and it quakes
But first, I really ought to finish ironing these napkins.
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| Re: Mother by sk8rs_rule_all |
9-May-03/2:58 PM |
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I would say "great use of 'talk' to rhyme with 'walk'" but honestly! This HAS to be a joke. Good 1! "and don't forget about mob" -- genius.
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| Re: âDeath To Doughboyâ by The Martyr |
10-May-03/11:47 AM |
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If you rewrote this as a homoerotic seafaring epic it would be the best thing ever.
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| Re: The band "Sigh" aced their MENSA tests by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
10-May-03/10:23 PM |
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stfu man, sigh own your face
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| Re: fuck that bitch by Lucifer |
13-May-03/5:27 AM |
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Excellent piece!! However, perhaps you should consider the distinction between "poetry" and "a series of uninteresting, mostly unconnected thoughts presented in a form whose only resemblance to poetry is its frequent line breaks". 10/10!!!!
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
13-May-03/5:45 AM |
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Do you think this is profound because it is stultifyingly simple?
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13-May-03/5:47 AM |
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| Re: Wake and Bake Club by sir_heff |
13-May-03/8:31 AM |
Oh shit, you really have done more drugs than me!! I was just acting like a tough guy, trying to play in the big leagues, but you're the real thing!! I made up the whole thing about being quadro-spazzed on a life glug. There's... no such thing.
I...I just...O Jesu what have I done?
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| Re: Sanctuary by Lolly |
13-May-03/3:19 PM |
Wanktuary (Free verse) by -=Dark_Angel=-
The whore pisses
I watch from the peepholes
neither friend nor my mum
is welcome here
I am hunkered down
wanking
watching
deep within the crotchtower
protected
hidden well beneath the gray
folding sheets
silent
listening for the rush
of footsteps
undetected
safe wanktuary
within walls
no one will find out...
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
14-May-03/1:17 AM |
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Don't listen to that cad known as Jeremi B. Handrinos / <{Baba^Yaga}> / Bachus / horus8. I think your song is great!
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