To Lesley

that would hurt.

that's it? a little ritual scarring, and you just walk away? WTF?

Too many selfs and not enough of anything else.

tada.

lesly's a fga na,e lol als

10, what else can i say

Hey, that's some real good shit, kid. I bet Lesley will really appreciate it!! Why don't you make some sort of multimedia presentation out of it? You could cut out the shape of your love from a single sheet of moistened cardboard, mount it on the very fabric of your being with a stapler of trust, and then shove it into Lesley's face and grind it back and forth until Lesley doesn't have a face anymore, just a sticky bulbous liquid red mass and you're screaming and trying to wake up but you've really done it this time, you sick fucker.

yeas. love leads to heartburn. well put.

is bahookie polynesian for shit

odd, but worthy.

painful

Holding a persons heart in your hand, caring only about them? Don't care about yourself because your obsession lies within and upon them? The feel of their skin makes your hands burn sensually?

Short and sweet... nothing wrong with that. Thought I'd let you know what I got from your poem... see if I was right in how I read into it. If not I'd like to know what it was that you were thinking with your words.

Congratulations, the love you feel is the truest of all poetry. Re-work the last line. You jump from skin to heart, there must be a better segue.

almost gives a haiku feeling but to long. u should see maybe about chopping into a haiku or adding to it. give it an 8 though cuz i can feel it. nice job

That's a dude's name dude. 8 for so bravely confronting your feelings.

If I were itchy skin,
I too would let her in
my bum.

not sure where this one was going.

Bahookie, your poem is no way nearly as odd as your name. i like this poem yet i can't understand why.