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Lost Soul (Other) by ChefKSP
I’m hurt, I’m lost, I’m in hiding again, I thought I never would have to hide feelings from anyone anymore, I never thought to think there will be no us, I was a fool to think there could be anything for us, I should never let myself become a fool for something I thought meant the world to me, I realize that I might hide my feelings from everyone at all times for eternity, I know people will never know the real me, I doomed to love no one but myself, For someone sooooo in touch with there feelings and yet hides behind them, Will never release true love to ones that should’ve been, I’m always gonna be a fool for love and never realize you’ll never be there for me, I can’t help something I was born for, I think I’m never gonna find the right one for me, I’m just gonna have to settle for a non feeling relationship, Hide for eternity from the ones we love, Never again will I become someone’s fool. Chef KSP

Up the ladder: Plume Gateau
Down the ladder: Snow

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.2857144
Weighted score: 4.5389576
Overall Rank: 12714
Posted: September 8, 2004 3:24 PM PDT; Last modified: September 8, 2004 3:24 PM PDT
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Comments:
[4] LintyWeenis @ 152.163.253.99 | 8-Sep-04/3:33 PM | Reply
I don't know. I couldn't get myself to finish the whole thing.
[2] klosterfobik @ 64.12.116.140 | 8-Sep-04/4:26 PM | Reply
No offence - but please try a different form of expression.Poetry is just not your cup of tea.
[0] Sasha @ 69.138.240.116 | 9-Sep-04/6:22 PM | Reply
Jesus. You are sooooooooo good. It just amazes me. The beginning of nearly every line with "I" provides a sense of continuity that more than makes up for the disjointed yet comfortingly predictable lines. It is hard to believe that this is the work of an adolescent struggling to keep it together.

A well deserved 10




HAHAHAHAHA

Fooled ya, didn't I.

No. Sorry. I was kidding. This poem sucks. I know it's hard to bear someone telling you that but it does. It reminds me of the soppy crap of my English teacher way way way back in my freshman year of highschool: Self-righteous, cliché, and about as articulate as George Bush while talking to the cop who pulled him over for drunk driving.

A well deserved 0.
[1] horus8 @ 24.130.62.102 | 9-Sep-04/9:32 PM | Reply
Fucketti Surprise!!! the surprise is
a herd of turds parked in your mouth piece.
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