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To Lesley (Free verse) by Bahookie

I truly love another Myself is put aside Your self soft skin burning A heart in my hand

god'swife 18-Aug-03/10:49 AM
Congratulations, the love you feel is the truest of all poetry. Re-work the last line. You jump from skin to heart, there must be a better segue.




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