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To Lesley (Free verse) by Bahookie

I truly love another Myself is put aside Your self soft skin burning A heart in my hand

justjay 18-Aug-03/8:31 PM
almost gives a haiku feeling but to long. u should see maybe about chopping into a haiku or adding to it. give it an 8 though cuz i can feel it. nice job




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