Re: Structure of a Woman by al-naafiysh	9-Jul-07/10:12 AM
"Nothing is more deceitful," said Darcy, "than the appearance of humility. It is often only carelessness of opinion, and sometimes an indirect boast." In your case, I'd say it's the indirect boast. But that aside, Womens always fancy themselves as "complex" creatures. The reality, I'm afraid, is heavily laden with shame: http://tinyurl.com/2bxrqo
Re: Day Dream by Jessina	9-Dec-07/5:35 AM
This is an excellent poeme. Unfortunately it makes me think that you don't really appreciate the true meaning of Christmas. You think it's all about getting presents, but it's not.
Re: Home coming of her love by Jessina	9-Dec-07/5:39 AM
"Sighing profoundly she saunter" is a very haunting line to open with. Is that what you were aiming for?
Re: Whore of Babylon by oneglove	9-Dec-07/5:43 AM
Is this communist talk!? Get it off this site or I'll call the police.
Re: Return from Dubious Mission by Dovina	9-Dec-07/5:49 AM
Garbled nonsense. Throw it in the bin.
Re: Voice of the World by Dovina	15-Jan-08/4:00 PM
I think Kipling said it best: Take up the White Man's burden— The savage wars of peace— Fill full the mouth of Famine, And bid the sickness cease; And when your goal is nearest (The end for others sought) Watch sloth and heathen folly Bring all your hope to nought. That is why I shan't be donating.
Re: Spectrum Of Passion by Mickey Pig Knuckles	15-Jan-08/4:07 PM
Thank you so much for sharing your gift of literature. This is one of the excellentest poemes I have read today and it doesn't matter that it doesn't rhyme because not all poemes have to rhyme you idiot.
Re: Unemployed by OneFingerAnswer	15-Jan-08/4:46 PM
Couldn't He have just gone round to someone's house and cleaned up?
Re: Him by hobojo	23-Jan-08/11:15 AM
An aged wipe is but a paltry thing, A tattered rag upon a stick, unless Buttocks sally forth and cling, and bravely cling To every blemmish on its scrunched up mess, Nor is there parping school but studying Monuments of its own brownificence; And therefore I have sailed the seas and come To the holy city of Brownium. From "Sailing to Brownium" by William Butler Yeats
Re: Delicate hearts grow thick skins. by Nepanthe	22-Feb-08/7:37 PM
Reads like the ramblings of a toothless simpleton. Are you semi-literate, or what? Self-referential poemes are exceedingly bow'ls. But this is not. This is bum-crushingly stupid. For that you should be proud.
Re: plea bargain by malpaso	22-Feb-08/7:41 PM
Quality. I love the line breaks before and after "see nothing deep". How on Earth did you come up with that? Pure instinct I guess...
Re: Trust by hobojo	22-Feb-08/7:55 PM
This is exemplary of your talent.
regarding some deleted poem...	4-May-08/2:29 AM
http://tinyurl.com/2n6aga
Re: Whispers among me by celticskatermatt1	16-Sep-08/3:15 PM
How did you come up with the idea of putting a line break between "arm stills" and "Past aggressions"? Did you think: if I don't put a line break soon, the line will end up being longer than the other lines, and then my "poem" won't look like a poem at all. Hmm?
Re: Ally McBeal by Pie	16-Sep-08/3:17 PM
AIDS is not suitable subject matter for poetry: I don't know about everyone else, but I want you off this site.
Re: The Answer (dating over 40ish) by Bethy	16-Sep-08/3:24 PM
Your use of the word "snatch" lowered the tone rather shockingly... but I do sympathise. Unlike women, men get more attractive as they get older. They become grizzled, bearded warriors with large, masculine bellies which they use to store reserves of nutrients in case there's a war. In fact, the optimum age for a man is whatever age Sean Connery is now. Women reach their peak at 19.
Re: Suicide Note [Disposal Instructions Included] by SupremeDreamer	16-Sep-08/3:28 PM
Oil my bald cheeks.
Re: SWF seeks SWM by Bethy	16-Sep-08/3:36 PM
It always amuses me when, in between thinking about shoes, women sometimes find time to write poetry. Does the W stand for White? If so, isn't that racist?
Re: Wind By Any Other Name by Edna Sweetlove	31-Jan-13/3:31 PM
Preposterously self-absorbed.
Re: alcohol is home. by SupremeDreamer	19-Jun-18/4:55 PM
A profoundly silly piece. I can't be bothered to dig up the original Checkliste, but this bulgingly stupid offering certainly ticks a few dunce-boxes: [X] Arbitrary line breaks [X] Clerical errors [X] Cliched imagery (gazing out of window, pits of despair) [X] 'Depression' words (putrid, wretched, darkness) [X] Devoid of alliteration or any such linguistic embellishments [X] Devoid of rhyme [X] Devoid of simile, reification or any such literary devices [X] Devoid of wondrous or fantastical imagery [X] Drug reference [X] Melodramatic [X] Overabundance of ellipses [X] Pointedly unanswered questions [X] Self-obsessed -10-