replying on Joshua And Ruth by amanda_dcosta
8 Jul 2006, 10:07 AM
Thanks for the support Al.
replying on Joshua And Ruth by amanda_dcosta
8 Jul 2006, 1:52 AM
Thanks Dovina,
I titled this poem 'Joshua and Ruth' because they are the inspiration behind this piece.
Maybe hell is a little too harsh to be refered to, but in life many times we come across situations where we actually break down and call our lives a living hell. At these times it would be helpful to be in the presence of little children, for they can be the utmost comfort when you need it most.
I titled this poem 'Joshua and Ruth' because they are the inspiration behind this piece.
Maybe hell is a little too harsh to be refered to, but in life many times we come across situations where we actually break down and call our lives a living hell. At these times it would be helpful to be in the presence of little children, for they can be the utmost comfort when you need it most.
replying on A Boy Without Rain by D. $ Fontera
5 Jul 2006, 11:57 PM
Lol. Fair enough.
on A Boy Without Rain by D. $ Fontera
5 Jul 2006, 8:18 PM
A nice theme, there, and I like the last four lines....
Pls punctuate. It's like I have to re read to get the right tone and flow of words.
Pls punctuate. It's like I have to re read to get the right tone and flow of words.
on wait and see by hendrimike
5 Jul 2006, 7:59 PM
Not bad.
on good to see you by hendrimike
5 Jul 2006, 7:57 PM
Don't tell that no one's actually voted and commented here. So much for decency! I bet if you had to put one sick word into it you'd have probably got a dozen votes.
To nit-pick, I'd like it if there were caps for the 'i'. I personally dislike seeing it in small letters, or maybe I'm too particular about that. It would also be nice if the beginning of verses were also caps. It gives a very disordered look without it, making your piece look less impressive.
I'm trying to put a tune to it. Think one could fit in , so ... I could probably say that it's fairly good. The lyrics though, are a little common.
To nit-pick, I'd like it if there were caps for the 'i'. I personally dislike seeing it in small letters, or maybe I'm too particular about that. It would also be nice if the beginning of verses were also caps. It gives a very disordered look without it, making your piece look less impressive.
I'm trying to put a tune to it. Think one could fit in , so ... I could probably say that it's fairly good. The lyrics though, are a little common.
replying on Astronomy and Pharmaceuticals by wilco
5 Jul 2006, 7:46 PM
Any time. And all the best!
replying on Higher education by ecargo
5 Jul 2006, 7:41 PM
Are all guys demented?
on What? (Wot?) by ecargo
5 Jul 2006, 7:38 PM
Is this some kind of a Genesis sequel? .... day, light, word, air, birds, breath, ......???
on Astronomy and Pharmaceuticals by wilco
5 Jul 2006, 7:36 PM
P.S. Any new recordings recently?
on Astronomy and Pharmaceuticals by wilco
5 Jul 2006, 7:34 PM
Hey, wilco.... cool. When I read the title in the 'recent list', I was wondering what you'd sing about in astronomy and pharm...
Sounds nostalgic to me, but good.
Sounds nostalgic to me, but good.
replying on Goliath by amanda_dcosta
5 Jul 2006, 12:05 AM
Hi Paul... thanks. Looks like its food for thought for all of us.
How are you? Haven't seen you around lately.
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How are you? Haven't seen you around lately.
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on Hugo by little_angel_maria
4 Jul 2006, 6:55 AM
Hello Maria,
As you can see, i am not the only one with the opinion I am about to share withyou. Ranger has the same views. Personally I ain't too impressed with your presentation and feel that you have to be original with this age-old topic Love. You've mentioned the word love toomany times and this also takes away the essence of the theme. I would rather you shorten your lines and fit it into beautifully presented verses (rhyming or free verses) with the same idea and theme you have in mind. Sorry to disappoint but I think I have to be frank in my opinion.
As you can see, i am not the only one with the opinion I am about to share withyou. Ranger has the same views. Personally I ain't too impressed with your presentation and feel that you have to be original with this age-old topic Love. You've mentioned the word love toomany times and this also takes away the essence of the theme. I would rather you shorten your lines and fit it into beautifully presented verses (rhyming or free verses) with the same idea and theme you have in mind. Sorry to disappoint but I think I have to be frank in my opinion.
on August 23, 1944 - 102 miles west of Paris by Ranger
4 Jul 2006, 6:46 AM
Great writing...although I can't add much by way of war-facts and distances.
on O say, can you see? by Dovina
4 Jul 2006, 6:39 AM
Nice thought and pretty well conveyed too.
I esp like the last bit...
So pop that cracker,
suspend the fight,
enjoy the margin,
and sparkle the night.
I esp like the last bit...
So pop that cracker,
suspend the fight,
enjoy the margin,
and sparkle the night.
replying on Goliath by amanda_dcosta
3 Jul 2006, 7:31 AM
Thanks Dovina.
Actually laziness in all reality isn't a giant slug, and for that matter all our various Goliaths , say, greed, money, gambling, drink, etc. When you actually want to get around it, you feel the actual battle rage within you. When you give in, you become the slug.
Actually laziness in all reality isn't a giant slug, and for that matter all our various Goliaths , say, greed, money, gambling, drink, etc. When you actually want to get around it, you feel the actual battle rage within you. When you give in, you become the slug.
replying on Goliath by amanda_dcosta
3 Jul 2006, 7:27 AM
Thanks ecargo. But I'm very bad at presenting riddles.... somehow they never turn out right.
on Songs of the hedge bird by ALChemy
3 Jul 2006, 7:13 AM
All I can say Al, is that it's beautiful.
replying on Goliath by amanda_dcosta
2 Jul 2006, 10:01 AM
Thanks DA. and sorry I couldn't chat with you.