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Goliath

Member since 2005 · Posted 1 Jul 2006 · Edited 1 Jul 2006 · 12 comments

Goliath, If only I could understand your fate. You stand there undefeated Gnashing your teeth and spitting out curses Taking control of the world around you. Goliath, What makes you love The fear that grows in each of us As you pass by our doors Watching, waiting devouring. I see this Goliath in me, Heâs trying to possess me Trying to eat away at my life Tugging me on and promising me comfort Away from the daily chores of life. I struggle. He fights. Itâs a never ending battle. This Goliath of laziness in meâ¦ When will this battle ever end? Yes, when will this battle ever end!

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[9] Ranger 1-Jul-06/9:15 PM Reply

Good questions, excellent take on Goliath. It's pretty ironic that the laziness fights so much...I think of it more like a dead weight against which we struggle. The only thing I'd really change here is removing the exclamation mark at the end...they rarely appeal to me in poetry. Others may, of course, disagree.

[10] ALChemy 2-Jul-06/1:39 AM Reply

This poem remind me of a painting by Goya:
http://www.pkimaging.com/pic/mikp/art/goya.colossus.jpg
and a lithograph by Goya: http://www.artchive.com/artchive/g/goya/giant.jpg
Good take on the Goliath theme.

[n/a] amanda_dcosta › ALChemy 2-Jul-06/7:05 AM Reply

Thanks guys. Hope you enjoyed the new outlook to each of our Goliaths.

[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 2-Jul-06/7:18 AM Reply

Yeah good analogy. Goliath is big, bad and scary. Lets use him as a metaphor for all the big, bad, scary things in life.

[n/a] amanda_dcosta › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 2-Jul-06/10:01 AM Reply

Thanks DA. and sorry I couldn't chat with you.

[8] ecargo 2-Jul-06/12:46 PM Reply

I like the beginning a lot--"gnashing your teeth and spitting out curses." Good stuff. I like the metaphor aspects the best--you lose me a bit when you make it so explicit what "goliath" is (you don't give us a chance to figure it out ourselves).

[n/a] amanda_dcosta › ecargo 3-Jul-06/7:27 AM Reply

Thanks ecargo. But I'm very bad at presenting riddles.... somehow they never turn out right.

[9] Dovina 2-Jul-06/2:53 PM Reply

The beginning promises some fierce, ugly obstacle to which a well-aimed stone is fatal. But to compare the blithe thing, laziness, to Goliath--well, I think a giant slug would fit better. Still, the very unexpected turn has appeal. And being unbelievable is a trait of non-fiction.

[10] ALChemy › Dovina 3-Jul-06/6:05 AM Reply

Giants always appear to be lazy, think about it. The Jolly Green Giant and Paul Bunyan are my only exceptions.

[n/a] amanda_dcosta › Dovina 3-Jul-06/7:31 AM Reply

Thanks Dovina.

Actually laziness in all reality isn't a giant slug, and for that matter all our various Goliaths , say, greed, money, gambling, drink, etc. When you actually want to get around it, you feel the actual battle rage within you. When you give in, you become the slug.

[9] deleted user 4-Jul-06/1:35 PM Reply

Amanda, great poem, I'll think of this every time I start to procrastinate--as I often do.

[n/a] amanda_dcosta › deleted user 5-Jul-06/12:05 AM Reply

Hi Paul... thanks. Looks like its food for thought for all of us.

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