Forest Rain

by bamf909

Member since 2005 · Posted 25 Feb 2005 · 5 comments

Sunlight filters down, Flooding leaves of maple flame, Stained glass forest rain.

Rate it

0 is the worst, 10 the best. Pick a number, add a comment if you like, then send it. Keys: 0–9 pick, Enter sends.

mean 7.88 weighted 5.77 rank 1745 views 224 View voting details →

8 votes so far. Yours would make 9.8 votes so far

5 comments

[9] Bhaskaryya 25-Feb-05/10:15 PM Reply

Simply beautiful. Haikus speak volumes in mere 17 syllables.. This is a stupendous example with beautiful imagery.

Great work!

[n/a] bamf909 › Bhaskaryya 25-Feb-05/10:28 PM Reply

Thanks- I really appreciate the encouragement. The most enjoyable part of haiku, for me at least, is the way it can capture meaning but retain its brevity. The last five syllables are always the hardest for me, but I do enjoy the challenge.

[9] Bhaskaryya › bamf909 25-Feb-05/10:43 PM Reply

http://allpoetry.com/Column/423262

Here's a link that might help you. BTW, since you write in syllables and not onjis, even a 2-6-3 syllable poem on nature is a perfect haiku. May be that would make it easier at times if you fet stuck!

Thanks.

[n/a] bamf909 › Bhaskaryya 26-Feb-05/9:59 AM Reply

Thanks for the link. That was quite an informative site.

[9] wilco 26-Feb-05/8:47 PM Reply

One of the better Haikus I've seen in a while.