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Goliath (Free verse) by amanda_dcosta

Goliath, If only I could understand your fate. You stand there undefeated Gnashing your teeth and spitting out curses Taking control of the world around you. Goliath, What makes you love The fear that grows in each of us As you pass by our doors Watching, waiting devouring. I see this Goliath in me, He’s trying to possess me Trying to eat away at my life Tugging me on and promising me comfort Away from the daily chores of life. I struggle. He fights. It’s a never ending battle. This Goliath of laziness in me… When will this battle ever end? Yes, when will this battle ever end!

Ranger 1-Jul-06/9:15 PM
Good questions, excellent take on Goliath. It's pretty ironic that the laziness fights so much...I think of it more like a dead weight against which we struggle. The only thing I'd really change here is removing the exclamation mark at the end...they rarely appeal to me in poetry. Others may, of course, disagree.




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