Re: a comment on Racism 2 by Dovina	15-Jan-06/1:25 AM
Poems on racism seem to stress on prejudices, pride and a whole lot of superfacial crap. This is a very sensitive topic: it seems to show that you are determined on conveying your idea on Racism or trying to prove that one set of humans is superior, or that one is inferior. I would rather like to see something like "We are the world.... we are the children".
Re: a comment on Sunlighting by ALChemy	15-Jan-06/1:12 AM
Al, thanks for the advice. hope something good comes out of this.
Re: a comment on A Haiku by amanda_dcosta	14-Jan-06/7:32 PM
Thanks a ton. Most hepful. I should be able to do it! Looks like its centred around nature........... and am still going thru it. Shall try some more haikus. Wish me luck. ;-)
Re: Flow by zodiac	14-Jan-06/3:25 AM
Hmmmm. Quite good. ;-)
Re: a comment on A Haiku by amanda_dcosta	14-Jan-06/1:18 AM
is it? ;-)
Re: Racism 2 by Dovina	14-Jan-06/12:04 AM
Dovina, I hope you don't mind, but, personally I feel you haven't conveyed your matter very clearly. Somehow, I don't feel very impressed by it.
Re: Sky All Around Me (goddess edit) by ecargo	13-Jan-06/9:33 PM
The idea's quite good though the presentation could have been a bit more connected. I liked it. Keep it up.
Re: A Haiku by amanda_dcosta	13-Jan-06/9:28 PM
This might be way off. Criticism welcome. I'm trying to figure it out..... though haven't had a lot of time to think about it. With kids.........!
Re: What Matters by Dovina	12-Jan-06/8:39 AM
Excuse me, but spell out the 17 syllables here. Am I losing something. I still find it confusing figuring out a Haiku. 5-7-5?
Re: a comment on Sunlighting by ALChemy	10-Jan-06/6:27 AM
Oh! You didn't like my poem? Which one?
Re: a comment on Sunlighting by ALChemy	10-Jan-06/1:59 AM
Kindly refer to "slaves and serpents". That's why you don't connect quickly. How will you ever understand a child/ children. And what do you know about being spiritual and sensitive to people's happiness? That doesn't seem to be your priority from how I see it. Asking weird questions to sound philosophical makes you seem so shallow. Well, you said it, you are banging on about something you know nothing about, whether you have children or not.
Re: a comment on A New Year Prayer by amanda_dcosta	10-Jan-06/1:42 AM
<grin> I agree there have been a couple of mistakes, but the main theme has come through. Thanks for your review.....much appreciated. :-)
Re: a comment on A New Year Prayer by amanda_dcosta	10-Jan-06/1:40 AM
Alchemy, you okay?
Re: California triolets by zodiac	9-Jan-06/10:48 AM
Not bad...... You have a nice way of turning a very obscure scene into poetic reality.
Re: We'll be right back after these messages by INTRANSIT	9-Jan-06/10:29 AM
Hmmm, Ahem, .... I'm speechless. A bit weird I feel, or maybe its not got to me well enough.
Re: Slaves and their Serpents by cyan9	9-Jan-06/9:23 AM
Not my cup of tea. As for the para 1 line 4, you said it! Your confession suits you very well.
Re: a comment on A New Year Prayer by amanda_dcosta	9-Jan-06/9:10 AM
Suit yourself, cyan9. All the same, God bless us all this New Year. Happy New Year!
Re: The Ballad of Fraser Allonby Q.C., Barrister-At-Law by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w	9-Jan-06/4:16 AM
When I was checking the charts to find the best, i noted your poem ranking -1. Curiously I read it, and must say, hats off to you! you did a wonderful job on that - barrister or not. Hmmm, now for a hot cup of coffee....please may I have one.
Re: a comment on Sunlighting by ALChemy	9-Jan-06/3:54 AM
Oh... So finally he's christened! Topper Alchemy?
Re: The Forgetting by Dovina	9-Jan-06/3:40 AM
No offence, but somehow, something's missing. The poem's good, but I don't feel the punch as much as I do in some poems.