Re: The Pitâs Bottom by Dovina |
27-Oct-06/8:52 AM |
I'm not sure I deserved a response such as this, but thank you. This is very good, however im not completely sure of the over-all message you're trying to convey here. And evil is not a mystery, evil is me. I am evil, I am the DEVIL (woogy-boogy).
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Re: Bitter by Ranger |
12-Jan-07/12:51 PM |
dude, how have you been? do you still exist?!
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Re: Fanatic by Dovina |
12-Jan-07/12:53 PM |
nice to know you're still writing about me ;)
in all seriousness, very nice...how have you been?
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Re: The Medium of Dunce by Ranger |
17-Feb-07/9:23 AM |
What is this shit? Just kidding. I like the repeated lines.
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Re: Remembering Nick by jessicazee |
21-Feb-07/10:26 PM |
nobody named nick is worth remembering
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regarding some deleted poem... |
13-Mar-07/11:05 PM |
Nice, I can't say that I feel a strong connection to the situation, however I can see that you're not looking for something specific for the reader to relate to, itâs the outlook on life you want people to relate to; and I can see where you're coming from. You have a nice voice in this, very frank.
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Re: A twisted Trail in Edenâs Garden by Dovina |
29-Mar-07/3:17 PM |
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Re: Llamas by Skamper |
29-Mar-07/3:21 PM |
I'm not sure what is going on here, but I like that it's not obvious. I got the feeling of a mind furious with anxious thought, which seemed to work out well. Nice rhythem, as well.
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Re: Cane by richa |
29-Mar-07/3:23 PM |
Hahahaha, heaven-that's funny. But seriously, I like what you've done here although I can't say I get anything from reading this. However that is probably because I am stupid. Yay.
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Re: Benevolent Oasis by drnick |
24-Apr-07/10:32 AM |
I met a girl. I think I'm in love.
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Re: The Editor by Dovina |
30-Apr-07/3:01 PM |
I didn't like the comparison in line 6, but after seeing how you developed it I changed my mind. This is very well written, but I'm not sure what you mean by "My tone is altered by such poems." How is your tone altered, and why? It just doesn't seem to fit right there. Anyways, great job!
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Re: Beslan by Ranger |
8-Jun-07/1:22 PM |
Flawless with an outsanding closing line. If you like that sort of thing. ;)
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Re: Between two Truths by Dovina |
16-Jun-07/12:34 PM |
Well call me crazy, but I do like the fourth line; it's a good comparison because much like the colors of cars, the kind of church is a preference of what is basically all the same thing. Very nice!
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Re: Bonded by Skamper |
17-Jun-07/6:59 PM |
Dark and erotic, like your mother.
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Re: F Log-On by Skamper |
19-Jun-07/7:55 AM |
Very funny...not that I can relate or anything.
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Re: husk [hai-crete] by lmp |
21-Jun-07/1:54 PM |
I usually hate this type of poem, but you did an excellent job!
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Re: Better Things by EAger to Offend |
21-Jun-07/1:58 PM |
Wouldn't this be considered a prose? Either way, pretty good stuff.
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Re: Alcohol by tisa7 |
21-Jun-07/10:40 PM |
Awesome, I'll print this out and bring it with me to the bathroom in the morning. You know the cure for a hangover is smoking weed.
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Re: The Dark Poet by Dovina |
26-Aug-07/8:55 PM |
It is those who are in darkness that see light most clearly.
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regarding some deleted poem... |
31-Aug-07/9:01 PM |
Wow, I remember this...kind-of. This is what you get at about 4 in the morning stoned and drunk: a total whitman rip-off. Nevertheless, I think it's a sharp-witted social critique of modern relationships and how I should have nothing to do with them. This poem is ahead of its time; its time being the end of time. Groundbreaking.
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