poemranker ::Benevolent Oasis by drnick

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Benevolent Oasis

Member since 2005 · Posted 24 Apr 2007 · 3 comments

Sparks rain from fission skies With annoying iridescence. As far as my eyes can see Not one place to hide. The ground softly hums With dull dying light. A scorched surface and Not one place to die. I run for life, for comfort, I duck under burning trees. Eroding umbrellas Surround me and escape. Panicking, tripping onto Hot ash and embered floor. Swimming through glowing Smoke to find a friendly shore. Tired and raw, I take A final forfeited fall. Down into cool waters Skin split and balmed. Turning over to tortured sky I glimpse glimmering chaos. Calmly slipping into murky abyss Choking water, sucking bliss.

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3 comments

[n/a] drnick 24-Apr-07/10:32 AM Reply
I met a girl. I think I'm in love.
[8] Ranger 26-Apr-07/9:28 AM Reply
If Dali had rhymed more often, he'd have done something like this.
[n/a] drnick › Ranger 29-Apr-07/10:06 PM Reply
Thanks, when are you going to post something???