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The Pit’s Bottom (Free verse) by Dovina
If you fool yourself, you can walk and smile, rewrite the world all sappy. Postulate a great creator, exemplar, fair, supreme, virtuous and kind. Then paint a grim montage of worldly sin and horrors. Now, set about to reconcile— the beauty of the former To the ugliness beside. Wash God’s hands for Him, white as snow, but know, what’s good for the goose is sauce for the cancer cell, the liver fluke, the shark. But: Evil’s a mystery; enter it, not a puzzle, never solved. We attenuate no problems, believe the endless cosmos, always, without design. So let the rain slide down the window, Paint the sky a sloppy gray, We don’t fool ourselves in here, no one made us either way.

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.6
Weighted score: 5.0715218
Overall Rank: 6589
Posted: October 26, 2006 1:01 PM PDT; Last modified: October 26, 2006 1:01 PM PDT
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[n/a] Dovina @ 12.72.36.126 | 26-Oct-06/1:02 PM | Reply
This piece of doggerel is in response to “Crappy” by Dr. Nick, DND, Doctor of Non-Divinity, Pastor of the Michigan Church of Atheism.
[9] Ranger @ 62.252.32.15 > Dovina | 27-Oct-06/4:35 AM | Reply
Well what can I say?
[n/a] Dovina @ 12.72.35.2 > Ranger | 27-Oct-06/2:14 PM | Reply
Oh, I don’t know. Say, for example, that a theologian’s work is to prove the existence of God, not banter about with unbelievers.
[8] drnick @ 24.176.22.254 > Dovina | 27-Oct-06/9:00 AM | Reply
You forgot my other names: the anti-christ, enlightened one, Dr. God, The Everlasting Godstopper, and super lesbian dead-fetus Jesus.
[9] Ranger @ 62.252.32.15 > drnick | 27-Oct-06/10:10 AM | Reply
Ha! Everlasting Godstopper, that's brilliant -10-

Jesus was a lesbian?
[8] drnick @ 24.176.22.254 | 27-Oct-06/8:52 AM | Reply
I'm not sure I deserved a response such as this, but thank you. This is very good, however im not completely sure of the over-all message you're trying to convey here. And evil is not a mystery, evil is me. I am evil, I am the DEVIL (woogy-boogy).
[n/a] Dovina @ 12.72.35.2 > drnick | 27-Oct-06/2:13 PM | Reply
Well, Mr. Everlasting Godstopper, that’s a hoot of a name. What I am trying to convey in the part before “But:” is what a lot of theology tries to convey: a wonderful, loving God, an evil sinful world, and a means of reconciling the two. But it always fails when they find cancer cells among God’s creations. The second part says to forget all that and simply accept the universe as is—the atheist message. I call it The Pit’s Bottom because until a theist like me accepts the creation at its worst and attributes the bottom of the pit to God, she’s done for.
[2] Edna Sweetlove @ 85.210.250.132 | 27-Oct-06/4:31 PM | Reply
A combination of pretentiousness and ignorance. Boring too! I'll be generous and score it 4/10, no silly me 2/10.
[9] ALChemy @ 71.75.187.195 | 29-Oct-06/6:38 AM | Reply
The Tao of Dovina.
[n/a] Dovina @ 12.72.34.132 > ALChemy | 29-Oct-06/6:40 AM | Reply
So stick around and you shall hear more, or less.
[n/a] wilco @ 24.92.74.122 | 2-Nov-06/6:45 PM | Reply
You know I don't like these poems that are oozing Jesus all over me...so you'll forgive me if I hold my vote.
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