Re: a comment on Girlz by liljsmith87	31-Jul-05/6:17 AM
Brittanyy...it does seem weird that you like this poem...uhm...constructive? OKAY! liljsmith87, YOU SHOULD NOT HAVE PICKED UP YOUR PENCIL OR PEN OR CRAYON. This is one of the worst things I have read in...uhm, forever. Sorry, but honest.
Re: a comment on Hindsight by darby pyn	28-Jul-05/8:50 AM
You are welcome...
Re: a comment on Hindsight by darby pyn	26-Jul-05/11:06 PM
I posted, then read the other comments. I would say leave it just like it is...it tumbled out, didn't it? just like... from mind to paper, as-is? It reads that way, and for me, those are some of the very best works. It is real, it is there...it tastes, it smells, it is vividly colored, and man...having so been there, and out the other side...all I can say is, leave it stand. I think it is clear, and loud, and profound in its human-ness. If you clean it up you risk losing the grit that makes it hard to swallow, you lose the feel of it! Please, PLEASE leave it.(and, when you get to the place that you see and understand the truth of things, like you write in this piece, then and only then are you grown enough to move on, and beyond...you should be proud of you, that is hard, hard work to do!)Please, just let it stand as it is.
Re: Hindsight by darby pyn	26-Jul-05/10:57 PM
Man...I am putting this on my fav list...what a wretchedly real piece...I smelled it, tasted it, saw it from my hiding place in the corner, watching it unfold...vile stuff and real stuff...and I rose with you when you came out the other side! Awesome, awesome job!
Re: a comment on Stabbed with a Carrot by T. Jonathron Remp	26-Jul-05/10:51 PM
Stephen...WHAT???!!! Do you have some kind of complex? sheesh...you can't giggle at this? You have to take it so serious as to write a comment like that...man, you need to get out more...take yoga...meditate, get some meds...something!
Re: Stabbed with a Carrot by T. Jonathron Remp	26-Jul-05/10:48 PM
LMAO...wow...what fun non-sense...can't give it a high score, though it was good for a chuckle. You have a strange sense of humor...one I see in more than a few unique friends of mine.
Re: A thank you note(Not a poem at all) by thepinkbunnyofdoom	26-Jul-05/10:44 PM
Dearest pinkbunnyofDOOM...just an observation...you start out saying you don't care...but the fact that you responded, and at length, contradicts that assertion. (Along with the fact that you find it disturbing, albiet, at the slightest.) I don't know the politics going on behind this post...and don't care to. I would share, however, that I find a strange sense of disturbing satisfaction at the thought that this site is set up to observe behaviour and writing, and perhaps writers...and if I were the observer, I would be quite amused....oh, wait, I AM an observer...and I am...(quite amused.)
Re: Where did the word "ORIGIN" come from? by T. Jonathron Remp	26-Jul-05/10:35 PM
Here, Here! What fun! Thanks for sharing!
Re: Noble oboe now sings every next saturday evening by ALChemy	26-Jul-05/10:32 PM
I thought the use of 'upon the Moonbeam Starship Satellite" a little long-winded..and ? unclear...otherwise I like it. I was thinking...> upon the moonbeamed__________ (something).
Re: Worth by Dovina	26-Jul-05/10:27 PM
hmmm....cool...though you lost me on stanza 3.
Re: Polar Bearings by impert&ent	26-Jul-05/10:22 PM
YESss! Woo-Hoo!!!!! Two thumbs up!
Re: Internet Junkie by cuddlytiger17	26-Jul-05/10:16 PM
hmmm...kinda cool!
Re: Showtime by INTRANSIT	26-Jul-05/10:14 PM
man! This actually got my attention, as I kept on reading, and then you dropped the ball! CHOP! END> Nothing...it fell on its face! finish the thought here...you were rambling on with a story, that must have been leading somewhere...finish it!
Re: Only I wish I could say.. by PunkyPanda	13-Jul-05/3:03 PM
I am thinking you are young...keep writing, this is sweet and a look into young-ness. I give you credit for correct spelling...not one mistake! (which is more than I can say about a lot of people who post! (Other than> 'outwith'...but I figured a typo!) You got too wordy in places> 'before in my fears I drown.'& 'I, which you will ban'. My advise is to write as you speak, as you hear it said in your head...let it just flow as-is, then clean it up and work on anything that doesn't work.
Re: Why I Bother by empire942	13-Jul-05/2:54 PM
Sorry...I wonder WHY you posted this without a simple edit job...man...spelling, periods wherever, and not an original thought in there...boring, and not saying much.
Re: BreakBeat TimeTravel by nentwined	13-Jul-05/2:08 PM
hmmm...made me think...and sounds like lyrics. I am not thoughoughly sure what this is about...well, yeah, I get it, up until the last three lines- seemed to not be part of it, or I didn't get their connection to the entire rest of it. But other than that I like it. Funky rythm I like. It Pops and Snaps like music. Gonna give it a good, generous score.
Re: Drying, Cracked Roots by AnotherNothing	11-Jul-05/9:43 PM
The middle got a little loose, but this is cool...I get the thought. Fruitless places, things, people...things stagnant... resignation. I wish this would have been as good as the thought that started it...I would guess you didn't get it on paper as quick as it came to your mind. Gave you a decent score anyway!
Re: To Those Who Have Died Today by AnotherNothing	11-Jul-05/9:34 PM
Typo> I will never know you name (your)...other than that...I really like this...
Re: untitled by venusdemilo	11-Jul-05/9:32 PM
typo> exist not exsist...other than that, I thought I wasn't going to like this, but then it sorta grew on me. I am not sure where the 'poured' and 'prepared' came into the picture, as that seems to be about cooking...but the rest I get, and haven't seen it said like that. original.
Re: I wish I had a friend by un_oying	11-Jul-05/9:29 PM
oh, dang...it was going along so well, and then the last four lines..ugh! also, >"It’s to bad I can’t think", should be TOO. I would be perfectly happy if you just dropped the last four lines...then I could give you a decent score...either that, or do something else with the ending.