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Girlz (Free verse) by liljsmith87 There are these 2 girls and I love them more then anything
They have everything I want
And nothing but them is anymore important to me
But there of coarse are some problems
Ones that arent easy to fix
I try my best to solve em
But of coarse I cant get rid of the pricks let alone this one bitch
Who, used to be my friend
Until she got pissed
Made one mistake
And she put me on "THE LIST"
So now Angie isnt my friend
All because I went wrong
Terryn made my life miserable
Wished at first I didnt belong
But then I look at the good side
Happy the other girl I love is still my friend
And try to make sure
This friendship wont end.
Up the ladder:
Life Of Sorrow
Down the ladder:
A look at Horus8
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 3.483871
Posted: October 16, 2002 4:33 PM PDT; Last modified: October 16, 2002 4:33 PM PDTWeighted score: 3.4852521 Overall Rank: 13602 Comments:
can i ask you a sincere question? WHAT IN THE FUCK ARE YOU BABBLING ABOUT, AND WHAT EXACTLY CONVINCED YOU SPECIFICALLY speaking, THAT ANYONE SERIOUS ABOUT WRITING WOULD GIVE A FUCK?!
thank you for proving that the crap poeme-pump is still in service.
if I beat myself into a delusional state, would I then understand why you wrote this and whatyou expected?
so what u got dumped get the fuck over it..... ya know i would tell you to get a blow up doll but she would proly leave your titty baby whinning ass too! ~0~
oh yea one more thing.... the poem is suppose to be about 2 girls you love ... rite? well then there is "angie" and there is "Terryn" but at the end you say your happy the other girl you love is still your friend...... what the fuck...im lost i thought there was only 2 girls. oh wait did you already have a blow up doll? damn then i guess me telling you to go get one was a waste of my breathe.
aww poor you being stuck on "THE LIST" seems terrible it must have affected you emotionally for you to have written a poem about it, not a terribly genius poem but still a poem none the less, maybe you should get help.
a number of grammatical errors and spelling mistakes..
maybe after you edit this and write something better.. i might just change my mind about my vote
As weird as this may seem I think this poem, if edited properly could have some potential. I don't know why people have to be so vicious in their comments though I mean hey, at least you gave it your best shot huh? Be constructive people!!
Brittanyy...it does seem weird that you like this poem...uhm...constructive? OKAY! liljsmith87, YOU SHOULD NOT HAVE PICKED UP YOUR PENCIL OR PEN OR CRAYON. This is one of the worst things I have read in...uhm, forever. Sorry, but honest.
it made me wince- i felt like it was written by an angry 13 year old with raging Jr.high hormones
Sometimes life is simple. Us vs them.
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They have everything I want
And nothing but them is anymore important to me
But there of course are some problems
Ones that are not easy to fix
I try my best to solve them
But of course I can't get rid of the pricks let alone this one bitch
Who, used to be my friend
Until she got pissed
Made one mistake
And she put me on "THE LIST"
So now Angie isn't my friend
All because I went wrong
Terryn made my life miserable
Wished at first I didnt belong
But then I look at the good side
Happy the other girl I love is still my friend
And try to make sure
This friendship won't end.
(I took the liberty of correcting your spelling)