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Worth

by Dovina

Member since 2004 · Posted 25 Jul 2005 · 13 comments

Consider a tree,s lithe sway as picture, plan, or metaphor. Classify its species, the elements that make it life, or the values of its wood and shade. I,m important like a tree, with buying power of a coin. But as a person, I hold worth per se, and submit a tree may too. If so, then pity its selfish state unless it knows some being knows its worth exceeds intrinsic.

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[8] Stephen Robins 25-Jul-05/11:26 AM Reply
I see from this poem that you are still a terribly wounded ditch pig.
[n/a] Dovina › Stephen Robins 27-Jul-05/5:48 AM Reply
Because I pity a selfish tree? If indeed it is selfish.
[8] darby pyn 25-Jul-05/3:59 PM Reply
I enjoyed this very much. 8
[7] INTRANSIT 25-Jul-05/4:33 PM Reply
And it's look, rude, unbending, lusty, made me think of myself,....

but not quite.
[n/a] Dovina › INTRANSIT 27-Jul-05/5:49 AM Reply
You must know some being knows.
[n/a] ALChemy 26-Jul-05/1:48 AM Reply
A little punctuation problem but it sounds good. I'm not sure you need "of a coin" in verse 3. You did a good job of avoiding sounding like a tree hugger.
[n/a] Dovina › ALChemy 27-Jul-05/5:53 AM Reply
I`m not a tree hugger, though the poem comes close to being so.

I don`see the punctuation problem.

I debated the `coin`in verse three, but decided to keep it so the reader could feel like a coin if he-she wants to. A lot of us want to feel like we have buying power.
[6] LilMsLadyPoet 26-Jul-05/10:27 PM Reply
hmmm....cool...though you lost me on stanza 3.
[n/a] Dovina › LilMsLadyPoet 27-Jul-05/5:58 AM Reply
I am important like a tree is important because I have worth like a tree. I have contribution that people are willing to pay for, like a tree has wood and shade. But I have intrinsic value also, independent of what I produce, at least in the eyes of democracy and the idea of being `endowed by my creator with certain inalienable rights.` Somehow, that is not good enough for me, and I want to be valued for something more tangible.
[7] INTRANSIT › Dovina 27-Jul-05/6:10 AM Reply
Being a sex object isn't good enough for ya?
[n/a] Dovina › INTRANSIT 27-Jul-05/6:22 AM Reply
It is good, and I like it. It`s part of having value that is more than intrinsic.
[8] zodiac 28-Jul-05/12:11 AM Reply
What's with the commas for apostrophes?
[n/a] Dovina › zodiac 28-Jul-05/6:48 AM Reply
A European keyboard is to blame. A need for feedback on such trivialities is not.